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Nowadays animal experiments are widely use to develop new medicine and to test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animal to suffer from, while others are in favour of them as they bring move benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Nowadays animal experiments are widely use to develop new medicine and to test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animal to suffer from, while others are in favour of them as they bring move benefits to humanity. v. 2
Some people believe that animal experimentations which exert positive impacts upon new medicines enhancement and testing the safety of other commodity should put a ban on by the authorities. While I tend towards the viewpoint that governments should apply the prohibition policy on researching on animals, I am still in agreement a limited amount with researches for the sake of medical. On the one hand, there has been a dramatic increase in ethical arguments against the use of creatures for testing. Firstly, the benefits of testing animals do not justify the suffering caused as they respond almost the same as people do such as crying as well as screaming. Therefore, scientists should find other suitable alternative methods to replace this way. Secondly, these tests violate their basic rights because we subject animals to such kinds of trauma that no one can suffer from. Thus, the lives of animals should be respected. On the other hand, I personally think that animal experimentations in terms of medical still can be utilized if scientists and researchers know how to take advantage of them. It cannot be denied that this method stands higher chances of advancing medical knowledge. To be more specific, many important medical breakthroughs involved experimentations on creatures. Furthermore, human lives have more intrinsic values than animals. Supporters reckon that a certain amount of suffering on mice and rats can be justified if human’s lives are saved. Taking an example of an opponent who needs products from animal testings, he or she is likely to experience a different feeling from their first thoughts. In conclusion, it would be wrong to prohibit animal over exploitation until people find out equally effective methods.
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experimentations
which exert
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positive
impacts upon new medicines enhancement and
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testing
the safety of other commodity should put a ban on by the authorities. While I tend towards the viewpoint that
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governments
should apply the prohibition policy on researching on
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animals
, I am
still
in agreement a limited amount with researches for the sake of medical.

On the one hand, there has been a dramatic increase in ethical arguments against the
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use
of creatures for
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testing
.
Firstly
, the benefits of
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testing
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animals
do not justify the suffering caused as they respond almost the same as
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people
do such as crying
as well
as screaming.
Therefore
, scientists should find other suitable alternative methods to replace this way.
Secondly
, these
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tests
violate their basic rights
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because
we subject
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animals
to such kinds of trauma that no one can suffer from.
Thus
, the
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lives
of
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animals
should
be respected
.

On the other hand
, I
personally
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think
that
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animal
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experimentations
in terms of medical
still
can
be utilized
if scientists and researchers know how to take advantage of them. It cannot
be denied
that this method stands higher chances of advancing medical knowledge. To be more specific,
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many
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important
medical breakthroughs involved
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experimentations on
creatures.
Furthermore
, human
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lives
have more intrinsic values than
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animals
. Supporters reckon that a certain amount of suffering on mice and rats can
be justified
if human’s
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lives
are saved
. Taking an example of an opponent who needs products from
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animal
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testings
, he or she is likely to experience a
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different
feeling from their
first
thoughts.

In conclusion
, it would be
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wrong
to prohibit
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animal
over exploitation until
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people
find out
equally
effective methods.
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8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Nowadays animal experiments are widely use to develop new medicine and to test the safety of other products. Many people argue that these should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animal to suffer from, while others are in favour of them as they bring move benefits to humanity. v. 2

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8.5
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