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Now adays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or a negative development. v.1

Now adays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or a negative development. v. 1
In the contemporary world, while Innovations surprise the masses every day, the problem of hunger still goes unaddressed. Even though agricultural reforms have improved the food productivity globally, the problem prevails in many parts of the world. Certainly, this is because of the irresponsible behavior and lack of attention of the Government and People toward the problem, which calls for the urgent need for rigid policies and awareness campaigns to counter it. With the advent of technology, there had been many agricultural advancements that have substantially improved productivity. However, Hunger is still a prominent problem in the underprivileged parts of society. One of the major causes is that Government policies are not strong and adequate to ensure a fair distribution of the food among the economically weaker people. For instance, it is many times reported that tonnes of food supplies are rotten in government or private warehouses. Another major issue is that Middle and higher-income households are not adequately aware of the problem. They often buy a lot more groceries than required, which is generally wasted when not consumed timely. While to curb the problem of hunger, it is very necessary for authorities to enforce strict policies and schemes, to maintain an equal distribution of food among all the sections of society. For example, the food warehouses should strictly monitor the shelf life of the food products and ensure its distribution and consumption, even if food has to be provided to economically weaker people at a subsidized rate. At the same time, it is important for the Government as well as media to educate and aware the masses, to encourage the best usage of the food supplies available. For instance, Surveys and researches should be published to educate people on how much actual groceries are required for a regular household and encourage them to buy the required quantities only. To conclude, The current world is capable of effectively eliminating the problem of Hunger and to curb this, both the People as well as the Authorities need to pay attention to the issue, bring reforms in the current policies and act responsibly to save food and make the best utilization of all the resources available.
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problem
of
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hunger
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goes unaddressed.
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agricultural reforms have
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improved
the
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food
productivity globally, the
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problem
prevails in
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many
parts of the world.
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, this is
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because
of the irresponsible behavior and lack of attention of the
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Government
and
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People
toward the
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problem
, which calls for the urgent need for rigid
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policies
and awareness campaigns to counter it.

With the advent of technology, there had been
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many
agricultural advancements that have
substantially
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improved
productivity.
However
,
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Hunger
is
still
a prominent
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problem
in the underprivileged parts of society. One of the major causes is that
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Government
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policies
are not strong and adequate to ensure a
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fair
distribution of the
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food
among the
economically
weaker
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people
.
For instance
, it is
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many
times reported that tonnes of
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food
supplies are rotten in
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government
or private warehouses. Another major issue is that Middle and higher-income households are not
adequately
aware of the
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problem
. They
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often
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buy
a lot more groceries than required, which is
generally
wasted when not consumed timely.

While to curb the
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problem
of
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hunger
, it is
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very
necessary for authorities to enforce strict
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policies
and schemes, to maintain an equal distribution of
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food
among all the sections of society.
For example
, the
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food
warehouses should
strictly
monitor the shelf life of the
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food
products and ensure its distribution and consumption, even if
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food
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has to
be provided
to
economically
weaker
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people
at a subsidized rate. At the same time, it is
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important
for the
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Government
as well
as media to educate and aware the masses, to encourage the best usage of the
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food
supplies available.
For instance
, Surveys and researches should
be published
to educate
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people
on how much actual groceries
are required
for a regular household and encourage them to
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buy
the required quantities
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only
.

To conclude
, The
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current
world is capable of
effectively
eliminating the
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problem
of
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Hunger
and to curb this, both the
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People
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as well as
the Authorities need to pay attention to the issue, bring reforms in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
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policies
and act
responsibly
to save
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food
and
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make
the best utilization of all the resources available.
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IELTS essay Now adays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or a negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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