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Everyone has a role in a social system. One person may have a number of roles because he or she belongs to various social systems, such as home, school, workplace, and community. A person in a particular social role will follow the rules of behavior for t v.1

Everyone has a role in a social system. One person may have a number of roles because he or she belongs to various social systems, such as home, school, workplace, and community. A person in a particular social role will follow the rules of behavior for t v. 1
It is argued whether supporting secondary school students for assessing their teachers in the pursuit of improving educational quality would result in disrespect and indiscipline in the classroom. From my point of view, students' participation in teacher appraisal is definitely helpful, but it should be administrated properly. On the one hand, it is true that feedback from learners may contribute to an improvement in educational quality. To begin with, this policy allows teachers to enhance their performance. When learners are entitled to evaluate their teachers, they enable a teacher to realize the weaknesses of his or her teaching method, improving their performance. In addition, by properly adjusting their approach to education, teachers may motivate students to dig deeper into their favourite fields. For example, at some high schools, after integrating such high-tech as computers and projectors into teaching, the student participation rate has been significantly increasing. On the other hand, there are several drawbacks of allowing adolescents to gauge their teachers. Firstly, teachers can be vulnerable to the negative words of students. Being bombarded with students' poor evaluation, lecturers feel stressed, exhausted and may give up their career when their efforts are no longer be recognized. Furthermore, the classroom may be in chaos due to massive numbers of comments. Opinions vary from students to students, and it would be impractical for teachers to work out a way of teaching that can satisfy all students. In conclusion, students' judgements provide an important source of data for evaluating teachers, helping them to discover their disadvantages and improve their performance. However, schools should give appropriate guidance and not allow excessive evaluation to become a window for students to vent their dissatisfaction.
It
is argued
whether supporting secondary school
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students
for assessing their
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teachers
in the pursuit of improving educational quality would result in disrespect and indiscipline in the classroom. From my point of view, students' participation in
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teacher
appraisal is definitely helpful,
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but
it should
be administrated
properly
.

On the one hand, it is true that feedback from learners may contribute to an improvement in educational quality. To
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begin
with, this policy
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allows
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teachers
to enhance their performance. When learners
are entitled
to evaluate their
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teachers
, they enable a
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teacher
to realize the weaknesses of
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his or her
teaching method, improving their performance.
In addition
, by
properly
adjusting their approach to education,
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teachers
may motivate
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students
to dig deeper into their
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favourite
fields.
For example
, at
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some
high schools, after integrating such high-tech as computers and projectors into teaching, the
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student
participation rate has been
significantly
increasing.

On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks of allowing adolescents to gauge their
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teachers
.
Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
can be vulnerable to the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
words of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
.
Being bombarded
with students' poor evaluation, lecturers feel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stressed
, exhausted and may give up their career when their efforts are no longer
be recognized
.
Furthermore
, the classroom may be in chaos due to massive numbers of comments. Opinions vary from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, and it would be impractical for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
to work out a way of teaching that can satisfy all students.

In conclusion
, students' judgements provide an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
source of data for evaluating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
, helping them to discover their disadvantages and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their performance.
However
, schools should give appropriate guidance and not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
excessive evaluation to become a window for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to vent their dissatisfaction.
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IELTS essay Everyone has a role in a social system. One person may have a number of roles because he or she belongs to various social systems, such as home, school, workplace, and community. A person in a particular social role will follow the rules of behavior for t v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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