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Question Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence? v.1

Question Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence? v. 1
It is thought by some, that brilliance is hereditary while for others, environmental influences play major role in determining intelligence. In my opinion, environmental factors contribute most to ones IQ. The rationale for these views will be discussed in the essay. On the one hand, to some people, there is no doubt a genetic undertone for intelligence. This is based on the observation that brilliant parents beget smart children. In addition to this, anectodal speculations have it that a certain gene is responsible for the inheritance of this trait. Although there is no scientific basis for this, it has apparently been a time honoured observation and believe. For instance, a certain kindred in my town, recorded academic excellence in their entire generation. Whether this is a result of values and virtues transferred down the lineage through physical and intellectual interactions or by heredity remains unclear. Conversely, the other school of thought which I belong to, strongly believe that the sole factor responsible for brightness is the environment. Not only that this has equally been noted over time, but also, it has strong scientific backing. Children who are exposed early to certain games, Mozart music, puzzles, and who interact with smart adults develop very high IQ. An example is a study that exposed quadruplet to different background and activities. The ones in mentally stimulating surroundings excelled intellectually, far more than the other ones. This is largely convincing that intelligence is by nurture more than by nature. To conclude, despite the two opposing views, I am of the opinion that one's background and exposure contributes more significantly to brilliance. The rationale for these views has been discussed in this essay.
It is
thought
by
some
, that brilliance is hereditary while for others, environmental influences play major role in determining intelligence. In my opinion, environmental factors contribute most to
ones
IQ. The rationale for these views will
be discussed
in the essay.

On the one hand, to
some
people
, there is no doubt a genetic undertone for intelligence. This
is based
on the observation that brilliant parents beget smart children.
In addition
to this,
anectodal
speculations have it that a certain gene is responsible for the inheritance of this trait. Although there is no scientific basis for this, it has
apparently
been a
time honoured
observation and believe.
For instance
, a certain kindred in my town, recorded academic excellence in their entire generation. Whether this is a result of values and virtues transferred down the lineage through physical and intellectual interactions or by heredity remains unclear.

Conversely
, the other school of
thought
which I belong to,
strongly
believe that the sole factor responsible for brightness is the environment. Not
only
that this has
equally
been noted
over time,
but
also
, it has strong scientific backing. Children who
are exposed
early to certain games, Mozart music, puzzles, and who interact with smart adults develop
very
high IQ. An example is a study that exposed quadruplet to
different
background and activities. The
ones
in mentally stimulating surroundings excelled
intellectually
, far more than the other
ones
. This is
largely
convincing that intelligence is by nurture more than by nature.

To conclude
, despite the two opposing views, I am of the opinion that one's background and exposure contributes more
significantly
to brilliance. The rationale for these views has
been discussed
in this essay.
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3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Question Some people believe that a person’s intelligence is inherited from the parents, while others believe that their environment is the main factor. Discuss these views. Which factor do you think is mostly responsible for intelligence? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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