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Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v.2

Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v. 2
In recent years, bicycles have gained less popularity than any other modes of transport. There are several reasons for this trend and some effective measures could be adopted to encourage people using bicycles more in my essay. There are a couple of reason to explain why people do not use bicycles on their daily basis. One reason is that using bike is ineffective. This is because when people travel long distances in case of emergency or in extreme weather conditions, using other means of transport such as motorbike, private car, and bus is more convenient and not physically demanding like bike. Another reason is that riding bicycles, people might be able to face with a sense of fear and unsafe because in most developing countries, there are no private lanes for cyclists. As a result, in Vietnam, there is an increasingly unpredictable number of accidents happened by using bike. Therefore, some practical solutions are suggested to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport. Firstly, anyone can build up their fitness, beginning with practising to use a bike for short journeys to school, to work or to the shops. Secondly, the government should construct private lanes for only bike riders so this not only guarantees the safety of cyclists but also increases their speed of movement. Thirdly, the local authorities should launch more campaigns in school and in the neighborhoods, aimed at raise people awareness of the advantages of riding a bike, for instance improving health benefits and keep the body in shape. This is expected to encourage people to travel more by bike in the future. In conclusion, I have presented some reasons why bicycles are becoming less common in today’s world and put forward some measures to encourage people to use this environmentally friendly means of transport for the above mentioned arguments.
In recent years,
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bicycles
have gained less popularity than any other modes of
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transport
. There are several
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reasons
for this trend and
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some
effective measures could
be adopted
to
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encourage
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people
using
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bicycles
more in my essay.

There are a couple of
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reason
to
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explain
why
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people
do not
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use
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bicycles
on their daily basis. One
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reason
is that using
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bike
is ineffective. This is
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because
when
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people
travel long distances in case of emergency or in extreme weather conditions, using other means of
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transport
such as motorbike, private car, and bus is more convenient and not
physically
demanding like
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bike
. Another
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reason
is that riding
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bicycles
,
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people
might be able to face with a sense of fear and unsafe
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because
in most
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developing countries
, there are no private lanes for cyclists.
As a result
, in Vietnam, there is an
increasingly
unpredictable number of accidents happened by using bike.

Therefore
,
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some
practical solutions
are suggested
to
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encourage
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people
to
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use
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bicycles
as a main
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transport
.
Firstly
, anyone can build up their fitness, beginning with
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practising
to
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use
a
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bike
for short journeys to school, to work or to the shops.
Secondly
, the
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government
should construct private lanes for
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only
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bike
riders
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so
this not
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only
guarantees the safety of cyclists
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but
also
increases their speed of movement.
Thirdly
, the local authorities should launch more campaigns in school and in the neighborhoods, aimed at raise
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people
awareness of the advantages of riding a
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bike
,
for instance
improving health benefits and
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keep
the body in shape. This is
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expected
to
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encourage
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people
to travel more by
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bike
in the future.

In conclusion
, I have presented
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some
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reasons
why
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bicycles
are becoming less common in
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today
’s world and put forward
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some
measures to
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encourage
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people
to
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use
this
environmentally
friendly means of
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transport
for the above mentioned arguments.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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