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Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v.1

Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v. 1
While, several individuals opine that the main reason for environmental degradation and waste disposal is the increase in the amount of motor vehicles, others feel that factories are the main source of pollution. This essay will discuss both views and agrees that factories are the principle origin for contamination and waste disposal. It is clear that the hike in the number of private vehicles on roads by people results in deterioration and waste disposal. This is to say, private motor vehicles when driven by individuals, release harmful combustible gases in the air such as nitrogen and carbon monoxide, thus resulting in air pollution. Moreover, in the attempt of purchasing new modified cars which make travelling more comfortable, people dispose of their old vehicles in dumping areas, which results in an increase in the amount of waste in the surrounding. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Time of India showed that the paramount reason for lowering the air quality is that more than 80 percent of cars are used for travelling. However, some disagree with the aforementioned opinion and believe that manufacturing units result in environmental degradation. In other words, industrial plants release toxic materials and other chemicals either on land or in water, which not only contaminate air, water, and land but also increase the amount of garbage. As a result, people suffer from many health issues such as asthma and bronchitis. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York Times showed that more than 60 percent of factories is the main reason for the deterioration in the environment. To conclude, although some people think that the increasing number of cars results in pollution and waste, others have the opinion that factories cause pollution. However, In my opinion, I vehemently agree that the main reason for environmental deterioration is the waste released from factories and industrial units.
While, several individuals opine that the
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main
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reason
for environmental degradation and
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waste
disposal is the increase in the amount of motor
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vehicles
, others feel that
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factories
are the
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main
source of
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pollution
. This essay will discuss both views and
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agrees
that
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factories
are the principle origin for contamination and
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waste
disposal.

It is
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clear
that the hike in the number of private
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vehicles
on roads by
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people
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results
in deterioration and
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waste
disposal. This is to say, private motor
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vehicles
when driven by individuals, release harmful combustible gases in the
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air
such as nitrogen and carbon monoxide,
thus
resulting in
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air
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pollution
.
Moreover
, in the attempt of purchasing new modified cars which
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make
travelling more comfortable,
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people
dispose of their
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old
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vehicles
in dumping areas, which
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results
in an increase in the amount of
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waste
in the surrounding. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Time of India
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showed
that the paramount
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reason
for lowering the
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air
quality is that more than 80 percent of cars are
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used
for travelling.

However
,
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some
disagree with the aforementioned opinion and believe that manufacturing units
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result
in environmental degradation. In
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other
words, industrial plants release toxic materials and
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other
chemicals either on land or in water, which not
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only
contaminate
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air
, water, and land
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but
also
increase the amount of garbage. As a
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result
,
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people
suffer from
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many
health issues such as asthma and bronchitis. To exemplify, a recent study by The New York Times
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showed
that more than 60 percent of
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factories
is the
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main
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reason
for the deterioration in the environment.

To conclude
, although
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some
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people
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think
that the increasing number of cars
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results
in
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pollution
and
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waste
, others have the opinion that
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factories
cause
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pollution
.
However
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
that the
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main
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reason
for environmental deterioration is the
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waste
released from
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factories
and industrial units.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Not many people use a bicycle although it has many benefits. Why? How to encourage people to use bicycles as a main transport? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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