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nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benifits of IT outweigh the disadvantages. v.1

nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. v. 1
People are living a better and more accomplished life due to the increased use of technology which has changed several aspects of our lives and in use in different areas of life. This essay will discuss the advantages which IT has given to the world when compared to the disadvantages as been discussed in some quarters. Firstly, in terms of communication and collaboration, IT has helped to bridge the communication gap. The use of email, short message service and chats means we can talk to one another irrespective of where we are in the world seamlessly. By using these methods, you can talk or see one another virtually irrespective of the distance between us. WhatsApp video calls are an example of how it can be used to reach other people anywhere they are in the world. Secondly, its use in healthcare. Virtual reality has taken over medical procedures in the hospitals as it is used to perform surgical operations making it easier to save lives without having to cut open human beings. By using virtual reality, a specialist surgeon is not required to be physically present to carry out a procedure but can use the Internet to achieve this. This technology has been used a procedure to remove an appendix. Thirdly, in the area of automation. Several car manufacturing companies have deployed technology to assemble cars rather than use human beings who are prone to mistakes. By programming machines to assemble cars, the process is much faster, more productive and more efficient leading to better cars on the roads. Companies such as Honda, Toyota and Hyhundai are leading examples in this sector. In conclusion, technology has done more good than harm to the society than initially thought and the continuous improvement of it will make the world a better place to live in.
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use
of
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technology
which has
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changed
several aspects of our
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lives
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use
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different
areas of life. This essay will discuss the advantages which IT has
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given
to the world when compared to the disadvantages as
been discussed
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some
quarters.

Firstly
, in terms of communication and collaboration, IT has
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helped
to bridge the communication gap. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of email, short message service and chats means we can talk to one another irrespective of where we are in the world
seamlessly
. By using these methods, you can talk or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
one another
virtually
irrespective of the distance between us. WhatsApp video calls are an example of how it can be
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used
to reach other
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people
anywhere they are in the world.

Secondly
, its
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use
in healthcare. Virtual reality has taken over medical procedures in the hospitals as it is
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used
to perform surgical operations making it easier to save
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lives
without having to
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cut
open human beings. By using virtual reality, a specialist surgeon is not required to be
physically
present to carry out a procedure
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but
can
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use
the Internet to achieve this. This
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technology
has been
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used
a procedure to remove an appendix.

Thirdly
, in the area of automation. Several
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car
manufacturing
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companies
have deployed
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technology
to assemble
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cars
rather
than
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use
human beings who are prone to mistakes. By programming machines to assemble
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cars
, the process is much faster, more productive and more efficient leading to better
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cars
on the roads.
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Companies
such as Honda, Toyota and
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Hyhundai
are leading examples in this sector.

In conclusion
,
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technology
has done more
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good
than harm to the society than
initially
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thought
and the continuous improvement of it will
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make
the world a better place to
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live
in.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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2Mistakes

IELTS essay nformation technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
6.5
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