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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v.27

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 27
In the recent times, the way of catering the news has changed dramatically. The periodicals and news channels put a predominant emphasis on the graphics, instead of words. Also, many intellectuals appreciate this new form of conveying the news. In my opinion, this revolutionized innovation in the media could serve the society effectively and efficiently. To begin with, the major influence of this pictorial way of communication with the new readers. Only words could not illustrate all the details of the news. While, the graphics support the text in a meaningful way to impart the information to readers. Moreover, the interesting representation of the news can successfully attract the teenagers to the habit of reading the current affairs. For example, the monotonous article on sports consisting only text seems boring for the youth, although the images of a famous sports person with the fewest texts motivate them towards reading the newspapers. Thus, the evolving style of articles maintains its importance in the society. Furthermore, in this fast moving life, everyone is trying to utilize their time to elevate their productivity. Many readers avoid to read about hearing the news due to lack of time. Consequently, the pictures and videos of the news provide all the information in a minimal time. Hence, the reader gets the benefit of time saving, as well as collecting the useful information. For instance, the videos and pictures broadcasted on the news channels would depict the actual environment and facts of the news effectively. Therefore, the significance of the news will increase by adding graphics in it. In conclusion, the new stories on media are essential to spread awareness in the society. I strongly believe that, by adding the photos and videos the writer or editor can deliver his thought in a meaningful and interesting way.
In the recent
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times
, the way of catering the
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news
has
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changed
dramatically
. The periodicals and
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news
channels put a predominant emphasis on the graphics,
instead
of words.
Also
,
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many
intellectuals appreciate this
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new
form of conveying the
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news
. In my opinion, this revolutionized innovation in the media could serve the society
effectively
and
efficiently
.

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begin
with, the major influence of this pictorial way of communication with the
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new
readers.
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Only
words could not illustrate all the
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details
of the
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news
.
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While
, the graphics support the text
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in a meaningful way
to impart the information to readers.
Moreover
, the interesting representation of the
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news
can
successfully
attract the
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teenagers
to the habit of reading the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
affairs.
For example
, the monotonous article on sports consisting
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only
text seems boring for the youth, although the images of a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
sports person with the fewest texts motivate them towards reading the newspapers.
Thus
, the evolving style of articles maintains its importance in the society.

Furthermore
, in this
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fast
moving life, everyone is trying to utilize their
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time
to elevate their productivity.
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Many
readers
The verb 'avoid' is used with the gerund form: "avoid reading".
avoid to read
about hearing the
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news
due to lack of
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time
.
Consequently
, the pictures and videos of the
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news
provide all the information in a minimal
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time
.
Hence
, the reader
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gets
the benefit of
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time
saving,
as well
as collecting the useful information.
For instance
, the videos and pictures broadcasted on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
channels would depict the actual environment and facts of the
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news
effectively
.
Therefore
, the significance of the
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news
will increase by adding graphics in it.

In conclusion
, the
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new
stories on media are essential to spread awareness in the society. I
strongly
believe that, by adding the photos and videos the writer or editor can deliver his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
in a meaningful and interesting way.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this? v. 27

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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