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News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. v.12

News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. v. 12
Pictures are more meaningful than words. Pictures which are shown on TV and in newspaper for News stories always give us definite meaning. In my opinion, I think the pictures In News are way more effective than words, however, I also believe that pictures helps to understand the movies. To begin with, Pictures are the drawing made to clarify the event or an incident visually. Even if people do not know what the incident or news is about, the photos take them out of the dilemma. For example, my grandfather who cannot read, even though, he somehow understands the news by simply looking at the pictures. It gives us knowledge and also helps us to know what is occurring visually. Secondly, people who do not understand the movies or their language can also understand the movie by looking at the pictures. For instance, one of my colleague does not understand the English language, although, he can tell what is happening in the film. Why? Because of the pictures in the movies. So, only by watching the pictures also helps to know the situation. In conclusion, pictures are way more useful than words from where people with simple knowledge of language can also know about the incident.
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Pictures
are more meaningful than words.
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Pictures
which
are shown
on TV and in newspaper for
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News
stories always give us
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definite
meaning. In my opinion, I
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think
the
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pictures
In
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News
are way more effective than words,
however
, I
also
believe that
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pictures
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
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understand
the movies.

To
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begin
with,
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Pictures
are the drawing made to clarify the
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event
or an incident
visually
. Even if
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people
do not
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know
what the incident or
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news
is about, the photos take them out of the dilemma.
For example
, my grandfather who cannot read,
even though
, he somehow
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understands
the
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news
by
simply
looking at the
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pictures
. It gives us knowledge and
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
us to
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know
what is occurring
visually
.

Secondly
,
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people
who do not
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understand
the movies or their language can
also
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understand
the movie by looking at the
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pictures
.
For instance
, one of my colleague does not
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understand
the English language, although, he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
what is happening in the film. Why?
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
of the
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pictures
in the movies.
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So
,
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only
by watching the
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pictures
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
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know
the situation.

In conclusion
,
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pictures
are way more useful than words from where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with simple knowledge of language can
also
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know
about the incident.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
206 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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