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News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v.7

News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 7
It is true that news is considered to be an integral part of many people’s lives. There are certain reasons why it is essential for people, and there seem to be two main reasons involved the sheer amount of negative news. Focusing on only positive news would be incorrect. Perhaps the main reason why news is necessary in people’s lives is that they can inform people about international as well as national changes. If people are aware of them, they will be able to adjust to new situations easily. For instance, reading newspapers, listening to news bulletins on radio, watching news on TV and on the internet can help people to find out new information, ranging from new laws to international actions and weather forecasts, all of which are important for people. It seems that there is more bad news than good news. Probably the major reason for this is that it is crucial to spread certain types of news, so that people will know about them. For example, news about terroristic actions, how they recruit people for themselves are important to be spread, so that people will be ready for possible circumstances. Furthermore, Journalists might want to encourage people to use their newspapers or radio channels in order to make money in this competitive world. People appear to be eager to know about bad news. It can be seen that news on the internet about burglary is read ten times that news about scientific research on ecology. Concentrating only on good news would be wrong. Firstly, there are both positive and negative news that people need to know. If news were not published because of its negative context, people would not be able to find out about them even though they are important for them. For example, expectations of flooding, storming and corrupt governments’ actions should not be limited to be reached the public. Finally, if the media focused only on good news, they would not do their job completely, leading to loss of public interest. In conclusion, due to the fact that news is informative, they play a vital role in people’s life. Many negative contexts and encouraging people to read news are the main factors why there are plenty of bad news. However, only good news ought not to be focused on by the media.
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news
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to be an integral part of
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people’s
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lives
. There are certain
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reasons
why it is essential for
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people
, and there seem to be two main
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reasons
involved the sheer amount of
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negative
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news
. Focusing on
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only
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positive
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news
would be incorrect.

Perhaps the main
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reason
why
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news
is necessary in
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people’s
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lives
is that they can inform
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people
about international
as well
as national
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changes
. If
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people
are aware of them, they will be able to adjust to
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new
situations
easily
.
For instance
, reading newspapers, listening to
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news
bulletins on radio, watching
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news
on TV and on the internet can
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help
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people
to find out
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new
information, ranging from
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new
laws to international actions and weather forecasts, all of which are
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important
for
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people
.

It seems that there is more
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bad
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news
than
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good
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news
.
Probably
the major
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reason
for this is that it is crucial to spread certain types of
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news
,
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so
that
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people
will know about them.
For example
,
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news
about terroristic actions, how they recruit
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people
for themselves are
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important
to
be spread
,
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so
that
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people
will be ready for possible circumstances.
Furthermore
, Journalists might want to encourage
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people
to
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use
their newspapers or radio channels in order to
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make
money in this competitive world.
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People
appear to be eager to know about
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bad
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news
. It can be
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seen
that
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news
on the internet about burglary
is read
ten times that
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news
about scientific research on ecology.

Concentrating
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only
on
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good
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news
would be
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wrong
.
Firstly
, there are both
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positive
and
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negative
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news
that
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people
need to know. If
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news
were not published
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because
of its
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negative
context,
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people
would not be able to find out about them
even though
they are
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important
for them.
For example
, expectations of flooding, storming and corrupt
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governments
’ actions should not
be limited
to
be reached
the public.
Finally
, if the media focused
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only
on
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good
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news
, they would not do their job completely, leading to loss of public interest.

In conclusion
, due to the fact that
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news
is informative, they play a vital role in
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people’s
life.
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Many
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negative
contexts and encouraging
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people
to read
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news
are the main factors why there are
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plenty
of
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bad
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news
.
However
,
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only
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good
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news
ought not to
be focused
on by the media.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay News plays an important part of most people’s lives. Why is news so important to people? Why is so much news dedicated to bad news? Should the news focus on good news instead? v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
388 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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