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News media has become more influential in people's lives. Others believe it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

News media has become more influential in people's lives. Others believe it is a negative development. v. 2
Paperless books are on the rise nowadays. The immense increase of online publications has led to the decrease in their paper formats. Indeed, a group of people considers it as a positive step while other, contradict the idea of e-books. Like every coin has both sides, virtual books has its own merits and demerits. E-books emerged its path towards modern society. A variety of people, ranging from students to professors, government agencies to even homemakers have started using online versions of books and documents. Consumers of electronic journals are of strong opinion that they this version of publications are eco-friendly and avoids environmental destruction. Nevertheless, there are other positives of using the online version of reading materials, like it reduces the paper mess around the house, takes less storage space and is user-friendly. A recent survey conducted by Ohio University states that "90 percent of the elderly people concentrate better if the words they read are bigger and clearer, which is possible through laptops or computers". So the pdf format of a reading material is used by them. On the contrary, another set of people is of the opinion that they are more comfortable using the conventional method of reading books bearing in mind the demerits of e-books. Some, according them are as follows. The e-books put a lot of strain on the eyes. A research published by Singapore Institute of Research and Science (SIRS) in 2019 shows, that the rays coming out from a tablet are harmful enough to kill 20 birds, thereby showing the harm caused by reading books online. To conclude, every technology has both advantages and disadvantages. But it is imperative to remember to use every advancement cautiously.
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books
are on the rise nowadays. The immense increase of online publications has led to the decrease in their paper formats.
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, a group of
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people
considers it as a
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positive
step while other,
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contradict
the
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idea
of e-books. Like every coin has both sides, virtual
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books
has its
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own
merits and demerits.

E-books emerged its path towards modern society. A variety of
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people
, ranging from students to professors,
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government
agencies to even homemakers have
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started
using online versions of
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books
and documents. Consumers of electronic journals are of strong opinion that they this version of publications are eco-friendly and avoids environmental destruction.
Nevertheless
, there are other positives of using the online version of
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reading
materials, like it
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reduces
the paper mess around the
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house
, takes less storage space and is user-friendly. A recent survey conducted by Ohio University states that
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"
90 percent of the elderly
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people
concentrate better if the words they read are bigger and clearer, which is possible through laptops or computers
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"
.
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So
the
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pdf
format of a
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reading
material is
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used
by them.

On the contrary
, another set of
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people
is of the opinion that they are more comfortable using the conventional method of
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reading
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books
bearing in mind the demerits of e-books.
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Some
, according them are as follows. The e-books put
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a lot of
strain on the eyes.
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A research
published by Singapore Institute of Research and Science (SIRS) in 2019
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shows
, that the rays coming out from a tablet are harmful
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enough
to kill 20 birds, thereby showing the harm caused by
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reading
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books
online.

To conclude
, every technology has both advantages and disadvantages.
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But
it is imperative to remember to
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use
every advancement
cautiously
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay News media has become more influential in people's lives. Others believe it is a negative development. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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