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New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.4

New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4
Today’s industrialised world, almost every part of life is changing seriously. One of the biggest change is that the robotic machines are taking more time in the production process rather than humans. This essay will examine the positive and negative effects of this argument and provide my overall opinion. From an overall perspective there are two key advantages of the technological manufacturing process. This can decrease the cost of producing and increase the time efficient. Nowadays, in many production processes, the companies are using robotic machines is because this method offers them to manufacture any products more cost effectively and takes less production time. Therefore, these companies earn more money. A good illustration of this is that this method allows companies to produced more products with taking less time rather than the human powered methods, so these companies make more many in shorter time. Secondly, producers have obligations to customers on maintaining the quality of their products. These machines provide a significant opportunity in error-free and all-time-standard in quality production process. In human involved processes, there are always reasons that cause the production errors. This may results the decrease of income profits because of the waste products which are produced with errors. There are also variety of disadvantages of this production method. Perhaps the main drawback is that it may cause that workers will lose their jobs. If the all manufacturing processes were automated, there would be no reason the human power for them. Therefore, many people might be removed from the jobs and they will probably not be able to afford their needs. In conclusion, it must be said that the machine powered production has more advantages in overall. Whereas, the impacts on people’s life have crucial importance and should be considered. If we can find a balance between these two methods, it will both be beneficial for the economies and individuals.
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Today
’s
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industrialised
world, almost every part of life is changing
seriously
. One of the biggest
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change
is that the robotic
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machines
are taking more
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time
in the
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production
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process
rather
than
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humans
. This essay will examine the
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positive
and
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negative
effects of this argument and provide my
overall
opinion.

From an
overall
perspective there are two key advantages of the technological manufacturing
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process
. This can decrease the cost of producing and increase the
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time
efficient. Nowadays, in
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many
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production
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processes
, the
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companies
are using robotic
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machines
is
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because
this
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method
offers them to manufacture any
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products
more cost
effectively
and takes less
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production
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time
.
Therefore
, these
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companies
earn more money. A
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good
illustration of this is that this
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method
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allows
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companies
to
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produced
more
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products
with taking less
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time
rather
than the
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human
powered
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methods
,
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so
these
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companies
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make
more
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many
in shorter
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time
.
Secondly
, producers have obligations to customers on maintaining the quality of their
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products
. These
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machines
provide a significant opportunity in error-free and all-time-standard in quality
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production
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process
. In
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human
involved
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processes
, there are always reasons that cause the
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production
errors. This may results the decrease of income profits
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because
of the waste
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products
which
are produced
with errors.

There are
also
variety of disadvantages of this
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production
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method
. Perhaps the main drawback is that it may cause that workers will lose their jobs. If the all manufacturing
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processes
were automated
, there would be no reason the
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human
power for them.
Therefore
,
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many
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people
might
be removed
from the
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jobs and
they will
probably
not be able to afford their needs.

In conclusion
, it
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must
be said
that the
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machine
powered
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production
has more advantages in
overall
. Whereas, the impacts on
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people
’s life have crucial importance and should
be considered
. If we can find a balance between these two
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methods
, it will both be beneficial for the economies and individuals.
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IELTS essay New technologies provided machines which replaced workers to do certain physical jobs and tasks. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
5.5
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