It is sometimes argued that young parents should take part in child-care courses in order to provide a decent education for their offspring. While I agree with these programs, I do not believe that all parents should be required to join these activities.
To embark on, to ensure their children will be well-cherished, parents are encouraged to come to these classes, which offer a great deal of precious knowledge. It is exemplified by a higher proportion of children who have good mental and physical health conditions that parents have quality time with them after making sense of their offspring when attending to these courses. Another reason is parents are required to have parenting skills such as food usage for children. In fact, numerous children are suffered from food-related diseases due to clueless about fresh food. Therefore, young couples are encouraged to attend these courses for a rich variety of benefits for their youngsters.
However, these aforementioned reasons can be seen as the opposite angle. Every child has their own needs or demerits and with the advancement of technology, parents can get access to a fair amount of information instead of splashing out on child-care courses. Moreover, people can ask someone who has much experience in raising children like grandparents since they have lived for many years and have brought up their own offspring.
In conclusion, while I agree with this assertion that parenting classes are beneficial for the development of a child, I do not believe wholeheartedly that educational opportunities for young parents in young households play an important role.
It is
sometimes
argued that
young
parents
should
take part
in child-care
courses
in order to provide a decent education for their offspring. While I
agree
with these programs, I do not believe that all
parents
should
be required
to
join
these activities.
To embark on, to ensure their
children
will be well-cherished,
parents
are encouraged
to
come
to these classes, which offer a great deal of precious knowledge. It
is exemplified
by a higher proportion of
children
who have
good
mental and physical health conditions that
parents
have quality time with them after making sense of their offspring when attending to these
courses
. Another reason is
parents
are required
to have parenting
skills
such as food usage for
children
. In fact, numerous
children
are suffered
from food-related diseases due to clueless about fresh food.
Therefore
,
young
couples
are encouraged
to attend these
courses
for a rich variety of benefits for their youngsters.
However
, these aforementioned reasons can be
seen
as the opposite angle. Every child has
their
own
needs or demerits and with the advancement of technology,
parents
can
get
access to a
fair
amount of information
instead
of splashing out on child-care
courses
.
Moreover
,
people
can ask someone who has much experience in raising
children
like grandparents since they have
lived
for
many
years and have brought up their
own
offspring.
In conclusion
, while I
agree
with this assertion that parenting classes are beneficial for the development of a child, I do not believe
wholeheartedly
that educational opportunities for
young
parents
in
young
households play an
important
role.
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