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Neighbours are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour? v.1

Neighbours are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour? v. 1
I think that my neighbour at least must be friendly. In the morning when I meet my neighbour he or she should greet me and wish me to have a great day. Also, it would be great if he did not smoke. I do not smoke and I do not like to smell a smoke from cigarettes in the morning in my bedroom if I leave the windows opened. A few years ago I lived in a small community. One of my neighbours smoked every morning in front of my windows while his dog was trampling down a beautiful lawn. It was really a terrible experience because I did not need my alarm clock to awake anymore. I was awake exactly in a few seconds after my neighbour began to smoke. From my point of view, the ideal neighbour must always be ready to offer help. For instance, If I need to go somewhere he would offer me to babysit my children and borrow his car. One more thing, I think it would be great if he picked up my mail and watered my plants while I was on vacation. Finally, I think good neighbours are those who become friends. From my opinion it is sufficient. However, if talk about my "ideal" neighbour I can add some extra qualities. First of all, he should allow me to listen to loud music. I think it would be great if he did not call a police if I decided to turn on my radio fully in the late evening or in the early morning. Second of all, my "ideal" neighbour should allow me to use his backyard for my party. I understand that it is almost impossible to find such a good neighbour, but if at least half of my requirements are satisfied I will appreciate it.
I
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think
that my
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neighbour
at least
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must
be friendly. In the
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morning
when I
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meet
my
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neighbour
he or she should greet me and wish me to have a
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great
day.
Also
, it would be
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great
if he did not smoke. I do not smoke and I do not like to smell a smoke from cigarettes in the
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morning
in my bedroom if I
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leave
the windows opened. A few years ago I
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lived
in a
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small
community. One of my
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neighbours
smoked every
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morning
in front of my windows while his dog was trampling down a
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beautiful
lawn. It was
really
a terrible experience
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because
I did not need my alarm clock to awake anymore. I was awake exactly in a few seconds after my
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neighbour
began to smoke.

From my point of view, the ideal
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neighbour
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
always be ready to offer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
For instance
, If I need to go somewhere he would offer me to babysit my children and borrow his car. One more thing, I
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think
it would be
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great
if he picked up my mail and watered my plants while I was on vacation.

Finally
, I
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think
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good
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neighbours
are those who become friends. From my opinion it is sufficient.

However
, if talk about my
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"
ideal
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"
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neighbour
I can
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add
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some
extra qualities.
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First of all
, he should
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allow
me to listen to loud music. I
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think
it would be
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great
if he did not call a police if I decided to turn on my radio
fully
in the late evening or in the early
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morning
. Second of all, my
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
ideal
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"
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neighbour
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
his backyard for my party. I understand that it is almost impossible to find such a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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neighbour
,
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but
if at least half of my requirements
are satisfied
I will appreciate it.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Neighbours are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbour? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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