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Name a place in your country you would recommend others to visit. Describe this place and explain why you would recommend it. v.1

Name a place in your country you would recommend others to visit. Describe this place and explain why you would recommend it. v. 1
Observation has concluded that trend of shopping is changed due to online shopping. There are many benefits for above occurrence along with certain drawbacks for the same. I believe that this way of shopping has more pros than cons, which is explained in the ensuing paragraphs. Among the many advantages of online shopping, perhaps, the most plausible one relates to more options. To be precise, now days, every item you can find on internet like books, clothes, electronic items and cosmetic items. In addition get more type of variety of same product so easily chooses the thing and check review of product which was given by customers so person choose wisely. For instance, my friend bought many books from the internet because he can check about authors and his other books as well as he a filter, some topic, so net filter that type of books and gave some books which are related to that topic so this work done without any efforts. Furthermore, the second merit is relevant to time saving and flexibility. In other words, people can buy tickets from the cyberspace or travellers and their office, but if one goes for tickets at traveller office, then he or she needs more time for that instead of books throughout the cyberspace. Whenever a person gets some free minutes that time he or she buy tickets from their place it is an office or a home. Thus, online shopping provides more similar type of products and gave some flexibility. On the other hand, one of the foremost demerit of e-shopping is a fraud. It means that a fraud in terms of money as well as wrong or damage things. To illustrate, some time show other items so people attract and order or book them then send or deliver wrong product. Therefore, in this way of buying has some chance of cheating. In conclusion, the advantages of online purchases outweigh the disadvantages. This has some merits such as giving more variety and convenience for the customer, however, it has some demerits which are not neglected and that is fraud.
Observation has concluded that trend of
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is
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changed
due to
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online
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shopping
. There are
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many
benefits for above occurrence along with certain drawbacks for the same. I believe that this way of
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shopping
has more pros than cons, which is
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explained
in the ensuing paragraphs.

Among the
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many
advantages of
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online
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shopping
, perhaps, the most plausible one relates to more options. To be precise,
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now
days, every
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item
you can find on internet like
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books
, clothes, electronic
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items
and cosmetic
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items
. In
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addition
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get
more type of variety of same
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product
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so
easily
chooses the thing and
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check
review of
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product
which was
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given
by customers
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so
person choose
wisely
.
For instance
, my friend
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bought
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many
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books
from the internet
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because
he can
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check
about authors and his
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other
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books
as well
as he a filter,
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some
topic,
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so
net filter that type of
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books
and gave
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some
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books
which
are related
to that topic
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so
this work done without any efforts.

Furthermore
, the second merit is relevant to
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time
saving and flexibility. In
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other
words,
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people
can
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buy
tickets from the cyberspace or
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travellers
and their office,
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but
if one goes for tickets at
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traveller
office, then he or she needs more
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time
for that
instead
of
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books
throughout the cyberspace. Whenever a person
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gets
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some
free minutes that
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time
he or she
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buy
tickets from their place it is an office or a home.
Thus
,
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online
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shopping
provides more similar type of
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products
and gave
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some
flexibility.

On the
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other
hand, one of the foremost demerit of e-shopping is a fraud. It means that a fraud in terms of money
as well
as
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wrong
or damage things. To illustrate,
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some
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time
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show
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other
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items
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so
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people
attract and order or
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book
them then
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send
or deliver
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wrong
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product
.
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, in this way of buying has
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some
chance of cheating.

In conclusion
, the advantages of
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online
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purchases
outweigh the disadvantages. This has
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some
merits such as giving more variety and convenience for the customer,
however
, it has
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some
demerits which are not neglected and
that is
fraud.
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IELTS essay Name a place in your country you would recommend others to visit. Describe this place and explain why you would recommend it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
349 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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