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Even though globalization affects the world’s economy and society in a positive way, its negative side should be not forgotten. Discuss both sides. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and rele v.1

Even though globalization affects the world’s economy and society in a positive way, its negative side should be not forgotten. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and rele v. 1
Although the agriculture sector has already seen many technological developments, many (a number of) people over the universe are suffering starvation. The main cause of this problem is overpopulation and the most viable solution is to educate them about the danger of overpopulation. The principle cause associated with having more people than the earth deserving. That is to say, lend for the cultivation of food is constant, but the people of the earth are increasing dramatically. The fixed landing of agriculture may not be sufficient for growing people. The result of this creates an imbalance between the supply of food and the demand for human. For example, a survey in BBC news found that within 2040 the people of the world will be doubled, which may not fulfil the demand for food and the world will fall into difficult situations and might find an alternative way to meet demand. A long term solution to this predicament is to educate young adults about the dangers of excessive people. Adults in universities could be taught how to control the population so that the next generation could not suffer from a similar kind of situation. Students can teach their parents and they may also be aware of this issue. Such kind of initiatives may impact the whole world and this will help to come out from that dangerous condition. For example, China’s government makes a law that each married couple may not take over one child to control their population. In conclusion, instead of the development of technology in the agriculture sector, many people are suffering from meal because of the increase of population, therefore, the government should educate them by providing more campaign in the public and may set a law that not take more children.
Although the agriculture sector has already
seen
many
technological developments,
many
(a number of)
people
over the universe are suffering starvation. The main cause of this problem is overpopulation and the most viable solution is to educate them about the
danger
of overpopulation.

The
principle
cause associated with having more
people
than the earth deserving.
That is
to say, lend for the cultivation of food is constant,
but
the
people
of the earth are increasing
dramatically
. The
fixed
landing of agriculture may not be sufficient for growing
people
. The result of this creates an imbalance between the supply of food and the demand for human.
For example
, a survey in BBC news found that within 2040 the
people
of the world will
be doubled
, which may not fulfil the demand for food and the world will fall into difficult situations and might find an alternative way to
meet
demand.

A long term solution to this predicament is to educate young adults about the
dangers
of excessive
people
. Adults in universities could
be taught
how to control the population
so
that the
next
generation could not suffer from a similar kind of situation. Students can teach their
parents and
they may
also
be aware of this issue. Such kind of initiatives may impact the whole world and this will
help
to
come
out from that
dangerous
condition.
For example
, China’s
government
makes
a law that each married couple may not take over one child to control their population.

In conclusion
,
instead
of the development of technology in the agriculture sector,
many
people
are suffering from meal
because
of the increase of population,
therefore
, the
government
should educate them by providing more campaign in the public and may set a law that not take more children.
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IELTS essay Even though globalization affects the world’s economy and society in a positive way, its negative side should be not forgotten. You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and rele v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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