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ın the modern life, family breakdown and divorce rates are increasing. Solution and discuss it. v.1

ın the modern life, family breakdown and divorce rates are increasing. Solution and discuss it. v. 1
All around the world, the number of divorce is rising and family connections are not close as much as in the past. It is believed that the people prefer alone, mostly than with family, from this reason a nuclear family structure is getting fragile. In this essay, I intend to explore the sources of this problem along with some possible to it. In the modern life, individuals want to live lonely and everybody goes on their own way without taking any such responsibility such as a spouse or a youth. This is because, the proportion of the extended family number is declining when compared with single adults or or broken families. Even if a person decides to married, after a short time she or he wants to break up from spouse. For example, İzmir city which is located in the west of Turkey has the most divorce rate. Surprisingly, the more modern and happier city than other developed provinces. It may be reflects marriage can not affect remarkably to personal happiness. On the other hand, single mum or dad impacts their kid's growth in a bad way. A kid grown up in like family, some physiological issues can be appeared to not observe a healthy parent relationship with the child. Due to parents should be thinking twice before divorce and they get some help Pediatric doctors for their youth. That is to say, not only personal life affected by it, also all in all society. It can be reduced that saying child health, and some advantages can be offered family with children, such as tax free car, free baby diaper. In conclusion, I restate individuals take care about own happiness in the modern life. They choose to live alone, some of them never marriage, others get divorced. Doubtless, children are impacted most. Thus, the people should be though primarily their child's happiness.
All around the world, the number of divorce is rising and
family
connections are not close as much as in the past. It
is believed
that the
people
prefer alone,
mostly
than with
family
, from this reason a nuclear
family
structure is getting fragile. In this essay, I intend to explore the sources of this problem along with
some
possible to it.

In the modern life, individuals want to
live
lonely and everybody goes on their
own
way without taking any such responsibility such as a spouse or a youth. This is
because
, the proportion of the extended
family
number is declining when compared with single adults
or or
broken
families
. Even if a person decides to married, after a short time she or he wants to break up from spouse.
For example
,
İzmir
city which
is located
in the west of Turkey has the most divorce rate.
Surprisingly
, the more modern and happier city than other developed provinces. It
may be
reflects
marriage can not affect
remarkably
to personal happiness.

O
n the other hand,
single mum or dad impacts their kid's growth in a b
ad
way. A kid grown up in like
family
, s
ome
physiological issues can
be appeared
to not observe a healthy parent relationship with the child. Due to parents should be thinking twice b
efore
divorce and
they g
et
s
ome
h
elp
Pediatric doctors for their youth. T
hat is
to say, not o
nly
personal life a
ffected
by it, a
lso
all in all society. It can be r
educed
that saying child health, and s
ome
advantages can
be offered
family
with children, such as
tax free
car, free baby diaper.

I
n conclusion,
I restate individuals take care about o
wn
happiness in the modern life. They choose to l
ive
alone, s
ome
of them never marriage, others g
et
divorced. Doubtless, children
are impacted
most. T
hus,
the p
eople
should be though
primarily
their child's happiness.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay ın the modern life, family breakdown and divorce rates are increasing. Solution and discuss it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
7
Overall Band Score
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