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n some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. v.1

n some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. v. 1
Farming is one of the major sources of income, as far as low- middle income countries are concerned. Although recent advances in technology have positively affected the agriculture industry, there is still poverty prevalent in several countries. This essay examines the reasons for the aforementioned situation before proposing a viable solution. There are lots of new technologies that were introduced in the recent decades, which positively affected the methods used in cultivation. The process has become easier to understand and the tools have turned to be more handy and available in the market. Additionally there are also applications that can be easily accessed by farmers to gain more knowledge about scientific methods of crop production. However, poverty is still prevalent in countries with horticulture as one of the major sources of income. For instance, 23 percentage of population in India, which is a country contributing majorly to cultivation globally, is still below the poverty line. This could be due to technology not reaching the underprivileged, corruption or the cost involved. The best possible solution is to subsidize newer developments which are essential for the farmers to practice scientific farming methods. For example, In India it was found the 60 percent of cultivators still uses the traditional methods of farming. Furthermore, the Government should also work on creating awareness about the schemes that can be availed by them. Stricter laws against corruption In conclusion, even though there are lots of new advances and innovative products in the field of horticulture, until it is made affordable and easily accessible to the farmers, it will not prove to be useful. The traditional farming methods will decrease the production and consequently leave a large section hungry.
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Farming
is one of the major sources of income, as far as low- middle income
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countries
are concerned
. Although recent advances in technology have
positively
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affected
the agriculture industry, there is
still
poverty prevalent in several
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countries
. This essay examines the reasons for the aforementioned situation
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before
proposing a viable solution.

There are lots of new technologies that
were introduced
in the recent decades, which
positively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in cultivation. The process has become easier to understand and the tools have turned to be more handy and available in the market.
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Additionally
there are
also
applications that can be
easily
accessed by farmers to gain more knowledge about scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
of crop production.
However
, poverty is
still
prevalent in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
with horticulture as one of the major sources of income.
For instance
, 23 percentage of population in India, which is a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
contributing
majorly
to cultivation globally, is
still
below the poverty line.

This could be due to technology not reaching the underprivileged, corruption or the cost involved. The best possible solution is to subsidize newer developments which are essential for the farmers to practice scientific
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
farming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
.
For example
, In India it
was found
the 60 percent of cultivators
still
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
the traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
farming
.
Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should
also
work on creating awareness about the schemes that can
be availed
by them. Stricter laws against corruption

In conclusion
,
even though
there are lots of new advances and innovative products in the field of horticulture, until it
is made
affordable and
easily
accessible to the farmers, it will not prove to be useful. The traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
farming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
will decrease the production and
consequently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
a large section hungry.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay n some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
282 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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