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Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What is the factors contributing to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.1

Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What is the factors contributing to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1
It is obvious that a large number of individuals used majority of their adulthood at their office, while work pressure is an essential section of adult life. The element that promotes work achievement is high pay jobs, and also enthusiastic in job is the anticipation of sense of wellbeing for all employees. One major aspect that is responsible for works fulfilment is astronomical salary. This is because when a worker received a high pay he or she would be motivated and happy to work harder. Take for example, an employee who works in a reputable company that pays enormous salary is always different from those that work in a small organisation in terms of work satisfaction. As a result of this, those working in a big firm worked harder with motivation. Thus, they appreciate their works with huge amount of salary. However, the authentic excitement for job enjoyment is that workers have enthusiastic in their job. The reason is that, employee would not mind the pay or gain that is on the job, but they are interested in the work because of the pleasure they derived from it. Take for instance, Adekoya, who is an actor, in his interview said that he derived happiness from acting, which has always made him the happiest person on earth. Hence, workers should have sence of wellbeing for work. In conclusion, many people invest the important time of their life in working, jobs enjoyment is a crucial component of employees life. large pay is a factor that promotes job happiness while zealous is a truthfull suspense of jobs fulfilment for every employee.
It is obvious that
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a large number of
individuals
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used
majority of their adulthood at their office, while
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work
pressure is an essential section of adult life. The element that promotes
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work
achievement is high
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pay
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jobs
, and
also
enthusiastic in
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job
is the anticipation of sense of
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wellbeing
for all employees.

One major aspect
that is
responsible for works
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fulfilment
is astronomical salary. This is
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because
when a worker received a high
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pay
he or she would
be motivated
and happy to
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work
harder. Take
for example
, an
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employee
who works in a reputable
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company
that
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pays
enormous salary is always
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different
from those that
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work
in a
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small
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organisation
in terms of
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work
satisfaction.
As a result
of this, those working in a
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big
firm worked harder with motivation.
Thus
, they appreciate their works with huge amount of salary.

However
, the authentic excitement for
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job
enjoyment is that workers have enthusiastic in their
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job
. The reason is that,
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employee
would not mind the
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pay
or gain
that is
on the
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job
,
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but
they
are interested
in the
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work
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because
of the pleasure they derived from it. Take
for instance
,
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Adekoya
, who is an actor, in his interview said that he derived happiness from acting, which has always made him the happiest person on earth.
Hence
, workers should have
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sence
of
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wellbeing
for work.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
invest the
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important
time of their life in working,
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jobs
enjoyment is a crucial component of
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employees
life.
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large
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pay
is a factor that promotes
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job
happiness while zealous is a
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truthfull
suspense of
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jobs
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fulfilment
for every
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employee
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What is the factors contributing to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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