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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.2

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 2
There is no doubt that majority of the people spends a huge part of their adult life working, and that work contentment is an essential feature of the wellbeing. In my essay, I will discuss some of the factors that influence job satisfaction and also look at how realistic the expectation of satisfaction for all employees. One of the major factors that lead to work contentment is higher wages. This is because people will feel satisfied when they know that they are earning a salary that is equivalent to the type of task they are doing, most especially when the task is very demanding. For example, doctors that are engaged day and night and receiving higher wages may generally feel contented with their duties. However, if the pay of these doctors is much lower, then there could be no job satisfaction. As a result, this will in turn affect thier performance. Furthermore, another factor that leads to a fulfilling role is the working environment. The reason for this is because a suitable atmosphere will make employees performs their duties more efficiently. For instance, the result of a survey carried out by the Federal Ministry of Labour and Productivity in Nigeria (2012) show that workers reported an increase in work satisfaction when working in suitable conditions compared to those who reported a decrease in job fulfilment due to unhealthy working environment. Most workers often have very high expectations with regard to their jobs they think is satisfying. As a consequence when these expectations are not met, they begin to feel disappointed in most cases. To illustrate this point, a staff, who feels he or she deserved to be promoted after three years of working, but end up not getting the promotion may feel disappointed even though he or she earned the position. In contrast, if he or she gets the promotion, hence he or she may feel satisfied. In conclusion, higher pay and working surroundings are key elements that determines whether or not an individual will be satisfied with his or her job, and that even though the expectation are often high, they are not often realized on the job while working.
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, and that work contentment is an essential feature of the
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wellbeing
. In my essay, I will discuss
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some of the
factors that influence
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job
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satisfaction
and
also
look at how realistic the
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expectation
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satisfaction
for all employees.

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people
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satisfied when they know that they are earning a salary
that is
equivalent to the type of task they are doing, most
especially
when the task is
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very
demanding.
For example
, doctors that
are engaged
day and night and receiving higher wages may
generally
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feel
contented with their duties.
However
, if the pay of these doctors is much lower, then there could be no
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job
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satisfaction
.
As a result
, this will in turn affect
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thier
performance.
Furthermore
, another factor that leads to a fulfilling role is the
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working
environment.
The reason for this is
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because
a suitable atmosphere will
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make
employees performs their duties more
efficiently
.
For instance
, the result of a survey carried out by the Federal Ministry of
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Labour
and Productivity in Nigeria (2012)
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in suitable conditions compared to those who reported a decrease in
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job
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fulfilment
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environment.

Most workers
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high
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expectations
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they
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is satisfying. As a consequence when these
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expectations
are not met, they
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disappointed
in most cases
. To illustrate this point, a staff, who
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feels
he or she deserved to
be promoted
after three years of
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working
,
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end
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, if he or she
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gets
the promotion,
hence
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feel
satisfied.

In conclusion
, higher pay and
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working
surroundings are key elements that determines
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whether or not
an individual will
be satisfied
with
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job
, and that
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expectation
are
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high, they are not
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realized on the
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while
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of the individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
361 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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