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Most people say that in order for one to be fluent in a language, they must live and work for sometime in that Country. Do you agree/disagree? v.1

Most people say that in order for one to be fluent in a language, they must live and work for sometime in that Country. Do you agree/disagree? v. 1
Majority of the people are of the opinion that for an individual to be familiar with a foreign language, they should reside and gain employment in the native land. In my view, I am strongly against the opinion because there are alternative sources of learning foreign languages without relocating to its origin nation. To begin with, immigrating to a native land just to learn their language comes with certain burden like finances. There are many factors attributing to the above view but settlement is the topmost priority when it comes to changing location. For instance, packing up bags from a known terrain, bidding farewell to close ones and moving into an unknown territory bring about thriving and adjustment such as having adequate money to sustain one till a job opportunity comes knocking. In addition, medical insurance is imperative in such journey alongside a living space, more so learning the nation culture and law is definite as certain continents have their lay down rules which must be kept. Using the ibo a tribe in Nigeria as an example, during their yam festival strangers are not to be seen outside, and no yam should be eaten until three weeks after the festival is concluded. A foreigner that relocate to a state with such laws just to learn a language stand at risk of breaking the rules unknowingly and probably facing the consequences which are often severe. Another point to consider is that learning another language can be done anywhere due to modern technology which have evolved in recent times. One of such is an online platform called internet that has vast amount of information and is also accessible at any given time or location. Furthermore, a search engine named GOOGLE enables one to know how and what tools can be used to learn different language. For instance, a doulingo app is an application used for learning French. Additionally, there are traditional based centers where languages are taught in a classroom method such as Alliance Francais which is a centre where an individual can get a one on one tutorial to learn and speak second language effectively. In conclusion, based on the above points, I believe that there are various ways of learning another language without having to reside and work in that location.
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are of the opinion that for an individual to be familiar with a foreign
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language
, they should reside and gain employment in the native land. In my view, I am
strongly
against the opinion
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because
there are alternative sources of
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learning
foreign
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languages
without relocating to its origin nation.

To
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begin
with, immigrating to a native land
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just
to
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learn
their
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language
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comes
with certain burden like finances. There are
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many
factors attributing to the above view
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but
settlement is the topmost priority when it
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comes
to changing location.
For instance
, packing up bags from a known terrain, bidding farewell to close ones and moving into an unknown territory bring about thriving and adjustment such as having adequate money to sustain one till a job opportunity
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comes
knocking.
In addition
, medical insurance is imperative in such journey alongside a living space, more
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so
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learning
the nation culture and law is
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definite
as certain continents have their lay down
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rules
which
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must
be
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kept
. Using the
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ibo
a tribe in Nigeria as an example, during their yam festival strangers are not to be
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seen
outside, and no yam should
be eaten
until three weeks after the festival
is concluded
. A foreigner that relocate to a state with such laws
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just
to
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learn
a
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language
stand at
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risk
of breaking the
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rules
unknowingly
and
probably
facing the consequences which are
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often
severe.

Another point to consider is that
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learning
another
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language
can
be done
anywhere due to modern technology which have evolved in recent times. One of such is an online platform called internet that has vast amount of information and is
also
accessible at any
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given
time or location.
Furthermore
, a search engine named GOOGLE enables one to know how and what tools can be
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used
to
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learn
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different
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language
.
For instance
, a
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doulingo
app is an application
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used
for
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learning
French.
Additionally
, there are traditional based centers where
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languages
are taught
in a classroom method such as Alliance
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Francais
which is a
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centre
where an individual can
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get
a one on one tutorial to
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learn
and speak second
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language
effectively
.

In conclusion
, based on the above points, I believe that there are various ways of
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learning
another
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language
without having to reside and work in that location.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Most people say that in order for one to be fluent in a language, they must live and work for sometime in that Country. Do you agree/disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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