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Some people think that you can never become fluent in language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that you can never become fluent in language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. v. 2
There are whole host of viable ways to imbibe foreign language. It is assumed that in order to have a great commend of foreign language one have to live in country where the language is spoken. I am completely agree with this statement, as other ways to acquire foreign language are not as effective. To begin with, the alternatives of picking up language within the country where it is considered as state language would be less effective. One alternative mode of learning language would be learning it at schools where it is thought by professional teachers. However, in state schools teachers technically can not deliver in depth language skills as they work with more than 20 students in average. Meanwhile, they resort to use their mother tongue to describe grammar and vocabulary. The other way which seems effective is to have private tutor, but this in terms deprive students from communicating outside lessons, which is sound obstacle to reach milestone. Therefor, these methods will not give the ability and skills to exchange information and ideas in foreign language fluently. To continue with, it seems to me that the best method of language acquisition is learning it in country of origin. People who learn in that way grasp language in more natural way than those who are not. By mimicking locals and using language in daily bases one can hone his pronunciation and vocabulary within stimulating environment. For example, those who immigrating to the USA after a while can easily convey information and after some period of time they can fluently articulate their thoughts and understand others, despite the fact that they had poor language background. Furthermore, it is opined by educationalists that it takes four months to grasp basics and two years to be fluent in language when one exposed cross-border experience. In conclusion, there are various ways to learn foreign language. Notwithstanding, I would like to single out the living in foreign country as the most effective way to practice language and be fluent.
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of viable
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foreign
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language
. It
is assumed
that in order to have a great commend of
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foreign
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language
one
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have to
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live
in
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country
where the
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language
is spoken
. I am completely
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agree
with this statement, as other
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ways
to acquire
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foreign
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language
are not as effective.

To
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begin
with, the alternatives of picking up
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language
within the
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country
where it
is considered
as state
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language
would be less effective. One alternative mode of learning
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language
would be learning it at schools where it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
by professional teachers.
However
, in state schools teachers
technically
can not deliver in depth
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language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
as they work with more than 20 students in average. Meanwhile, they resort to
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use
their mother tongue to
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describe
grammar and vocabulary. The other
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way
which seems effective is to have private tutor,
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but
this in terms deprive students from communicating outside lessons, which is sound obstacle to reach milestone. Therefor, these methods will not give the ability and
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skills
to exchange information and
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ideas
in
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foreign
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language
fluently
.

To continue with, it seems to me that the best method of
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language
acquisition is learning it in
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country
of origin.
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People
who learn in that
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way
grasp
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language
in more natural
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way
than those who are not. By mimicking locals and using
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language
in daily bases one can hone his pronunciation and vocabulary within stimulating environment.
For example
, those who immigrating to the USA after a while can
easily
convey information and after
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
period of time they can
fluently
articulate their thoughts and understand others, despite the fact that they had poor
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language
background.
Furthermore
, it
is opined
by educationalists that it takes four months to grasp basics and two years to be fluent in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
when one exposed cross-border experience.

In conclusion
, there are various
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ways
to learn
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foreign
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language
. Notwithstanding, I would like to single out the living in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foreign
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country
as the most effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
to practice
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
and be fluent.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
It is astonishing how much enjoyment one can get out of a language that one understands imperfectly.
Basil Lanneau Gildersleeve

IELTS essay Some people think that you can never become fluent in language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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