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Most people in the world need to work in order to lead a decent life or even just to survive. Many workers are motivated by money: if the job pays well, they are willing to do it. However, some people are not concerned with the size of their pay packet: t v.2

Most people in the world need to work in order to lead a decent life or even just to survive. Many workers are motivated by money: if the job pays well, they are willing to do it. However, some people are not concerned with the size of their pay packet: t v. 2
It is argued that our lives were more fulfilling when the technology was less advanced. This essay disagrees with this statement and believes that computers and the internet have made life better. The essay will first discuss how smartphones save us time and then talk about how the internet has improved education, followed by a reasoned conclusion. New phones, such as the iPhone, make our daily lives much less laborious and give us more free time. Jobs that required lots of energy and time can now be done at the touch of a button. For example, if we wanted to communicate with one another in the past, we had to write a letter, take it to the post office and then wait for it to be delivered, whereas these days we can simply tap the email icon on our touch screen and send a message in seconds. The internet has also enriched our lives by providing us with more information than we could ever need, thus making us more independent and effective learners. In the past students had to rely on a teacher or physical books for their education and these were often either unavailable or in a format that most people did not want, but now we can pick and choose what we want to learn. For example, there are now thousands of free online courses available on YouTube that anyone can watch and learn from anywhere in the world. In conclusion, life has been improved by technological advancements, particularly labour saving devices like phones and learning opportunities provided by the internet.
It
is argued
that our
lives
were more fulfilling when the technology was less advanced. This essay disagrees with this statement and believes that computers and the internet have made life better. The essay will
first
discuss how smartphones save us time and then talk about how the internet has
improved
education, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

New phones, such as the iPhone,
make
our daily
lives
much less laborious and give us more free time. Jobs that required lots of energy and time can
now
be done
at the touch of a button.
For example
, if we wanted to communicate with one another in the past, we had to write a letter, take it to the post office and then wait for it to
be delivered
, whereas these days we can
simply
tap the email icon on our touch screen and
send
a message in seconds.

The internet has
also
enriched our
lives
by providing us with more information than we could ever need,
thus
making us more independent and effective learners. In the past students had to rely on a teacher or physical books for their education and these were
often
either unavailable or in a format that most
people
did not want,
but
now
we can pick and choose what we want to learn.
For example
, there are
now
thousands of free online courses available on YouTube that anyone can
watch
and learn from anywhere in the world.

In conclusion
, life has been
improved
by technological advancements,
particularly
labour saving
devices like phones and learning opportunities provided by the internet.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Most people in the world need to work in order to lead a decent life or even just to survive. Many workers are motivated by money: if the job pays well, they are willing to do it. However, some people are not concerned with the size of their pay packet: t v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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