Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that it is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that it is beneficial. v. 1
Globalisation is here to stay, driven by advances in information technology and economic progress and increased international trade and investment. It has had wide - ranging positive and negative effects on employment and economic development, scientific research, language and culture and the environment. One positive result of globalisation is the global distribution of labour, it is now easier to move to other countries to find work, and this leads to better employment prospects for people and to more diverse workplaces. Not only this, capital and industrial resources have migrated to developing nations, thus providing local jobs and boosting local economies. It has also resulted in greater contact between different cultures, as travel has become relatively safer and less expensive than past. Further, ease of communication has encouraged and unprecedented level of global scientific research and co-operation and a subsequent explosion of knowledge and information. A downside of this global economy is that when a catastrophe occurs as in the recent global financial crisis that started in the USA, it affects the world. Similarly, when a virus emerges in one region of the world, it spreads rapidly, threatening worldwide health. Furthermore, globalisation affects culture and language too, minority languages are dying out because of the high demand of learning English for International Business and indigenous culture are dying out in favour of a dominant. Finally, levels of pollution are rising as countries strive for economic growth and competitive edge in the global market. In conclusion, globalisation is a double-edged sword that has created jobs and promoted international co-operation but has led to cultural losses, more environmental damage, increased health risks and exposure economic crisis. So government as well as society should take some mutual action against the negative development of globalisation.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Globalisation' is British English.
Globalisation
is here to stay, driven by advances in information technology and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
progress and increased international trade and investment. It has had wide
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
ranging
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
effects on employment and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
development, scientific research, language and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and the environment.

One
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
result of
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
distribution of
Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.
labour
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
easier to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
to other countries to find work, and this leads to better employment prospects for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and to more diverse workplaces. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this, capital and industrial resources have migrated to developing nations,
thus
providing local jobs and boosting local economies. It has
also
resulted in greater contact between
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultures
, as travel has become
relatively
safer and less expensive than past.
Further
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
of communication has encouraged and unprecedented level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
scientific research and co-operation and a subsequent explosion of knowledge and information.

A downside of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
economy is that when a catastrophe occurs as in the recent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
financial crisis that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
in the USA, it affects the world.
Similarly
, when a virus emerges in one region of the world, it spreads
rapidly
, threatening worldwide health.
Furthermore
,
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
affects
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
and language too, minority languages are dying out
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the high demand of learning English for International Business and indigenous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
culture
are dying out in
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of a dominant.
Finally
, levels of pollution are rising as countries strive for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
growth and competitive edge in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
market.

In conclusion
,
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
is a double-edged sword that has created jobs and promoted international co-operation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
has led to cultural losses, more environmental damage, increased health
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
and exposure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
economic
crisis.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
as well
as society should take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
mutual action against the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development of
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that it is beneficial. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts