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Most of the people in society enjoy watching crime movies and criminal TV programs. Why do you think people have more interest to watch them? What is the impact on society due to this? v.2

Most of the people in society enjoy watching crime movies and criminal TV programs. Why do you think people have more interest to watch them? What is the impact on society due to this? v. 2
Nowadays, people love to view different shows and films on television and in theatre respectively. However, they are more interested in seeing crime programmes than regular ones. In my opinion, they see it because these are more entertaining and it creates awareness among the masses about different dangers in society. To begin with, individuals show a great interest in watching offensive content because it fascinates them more than the drama shows and these are based on the real-life stories of the people. For instance, there is a popular crime show, which is telecasted on the Sony channel. In this programme, they broadcast the real stories of misdeeds that happened to the people in the past and it thrills the folks. Consequently, the TRP of the show is way more than the other drama shows telecasted at the same time on different channels. Hence, offensive appearances are more admired by individuals. Moreover, it has a positive impact on the community because it alerts them from various dangers present in society such as kidnapping, molestation and murders. Also, it tells them about numerous laws that are there in the constitution to protect them against these heinous crimes. For instance, there is a movie called Singham, released a year ago and in this movie, they explained how to tackle the situation if there is any misdeed happened with them. It was the super hit film at that time. Thus, it is apparent that it brings a positive change in society. To summarize, crime programmes are the most popular among individuals due to its ability to engage people and it also has a good impact on humankind as these are more knowledgeable than the drama shows. Nevertheless, more shows and films in this genre should be made.
Nowadays,
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people
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love
to view
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different
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shows
and films on television and in
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theatre
respectively
.
However
, they are more interested in seeing
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crime
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programmes
than regular ones. In my opinion, they
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see
it
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because
these are more entertaining and it creates awareness among the masses about
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different
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dangers
in society.

To
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begin
with, individuals
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show
a great interest in watching offensive content
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because
it fascinates them more than the drama
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shows
and these
are based
on the real-life stories of the
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people
.
For instance
, there is a popular
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crime
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show
, which is
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telecasted
on the Sony channel. In this
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programme
, they broadcast the real stories of misdeeds that happened to the
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people
in the past and it thrills the folks.
Consequently
, the TRP of the
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show
is way more than the other drama
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shows
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telecasted
at the same time on
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different
channels.
Hence
, offensive appearances are more admired by individuals.

Moreover
, it has a
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positive
impact on the community
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because
it alerts them from various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
present in society such as kidnapping, molestation and murders.
Also
, it
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tells
them about numerous laws that are there in the constitution to protect them against these heinous
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crimes
.
For instance
, there is a movie called
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Singham
, released a year ago and in this movie, they
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explained
how to tackle the situation if there is any misdeed happened
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with
them. It was the
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super hit
film at that time.
Thus
, it is apparent that it brings a
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positive
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change
in society.

To summarize
,
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crime
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programmes
are the most popular among individuals due to its ability to engage
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people
and it
also
has a
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good
impact on humankind as these are more knowledgeable than the drama
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shows
.
Nevertheless
, more
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shows
and films in this genre should
be made
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Most of the people in society enjoy watching crime movies and criminal TV programs. Why do you think people have more interest to watch them? What is the impact on society due to this? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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