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Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in addition to good qualification for job success. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in addition to good qualification for job success. v. 1
The ability which consists of social and other skills enhances the efficiency of work's outcomes. The paper agrees this statement because of improving quality of business and employees. The experienced staff is an important component in the business sector and play key roles with the quality of business. The significant problem is finding a vacancy for the job. Although most of the workers have gotten high school or college certification in their fields, social skill has an effect on the relation with among employees. Thus, skilled intellectual link to significant relation other companies and coworkers. Moreover, most of the researcher observed that social skills dramatically increase the multitasking skills as other coworkers which have insufficient intellectual level. For instance, the person which the job is communication with the customer, cannot understand customer needs. Thus, the customer does not want to talk kind of employee and the company might decrease reputation about their business. Another problem is the work efficiency of daily jobs. Most of the stable companies claim to develop their personal qualities, because, the employee has an important role in the facilities. Thus, the vast payments are expended to the human resources department. This department consists of professional employee which define the role of the job by applying. For instance, the department detects the information of the applicant which includes social skills, certification and level of their carriers. Of the sum, the reason for the business quality and personal skills shown that these factors cover the main role of the job mechanism, moreover high social activities can improve success on the job.
The ability which consists of
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social
and other
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skills
enhances the efficiency of work's outcomes. The paper
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agrees
this statement
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because
of improving
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quality
of business and
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employees
.
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The
experienced staff is an
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important
component in the business sector and play key
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roles
with the
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quality
of business.

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The
significant problem is finding a vacancy for the
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job
. Although most of the workers have gotten high school or college certification in their fields,
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social
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skill
has an effect on the relation with among
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employees
.
Thus
, skilled intellectual link to significant relation other
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companies
and coworkers.
Moreover
, most of the researcher observed that
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social
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skills
dramatically
increase the multitasking
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skills
as other coworkers which have insufficient intellectual level.
For instance
, the person which the
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job
is communication with the customer, cannot understand customer needs.
Thus
, the customer does not want to talk kind of
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employee
and the
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company
might decrease reputation about their business.

Another problem is the work efficiency of daily
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jobs
. Most of the stable
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companies
claim to develop their personal
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qualities
,
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because
, the
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employee
has an
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important
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role
in the facilities.
Thus
, the vast payments
are expended
to the human resources department. This department consists of professional
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employee
which define the
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role
of the
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job
by applying.
For instance
, the department detects the information of the applicant which includes
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social
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skills
, certification and level of their carriers.

Of the sum, the reason for the business
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quality
and personal
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skills
shown that these factors cover the main
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role
of the
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job
mechanism,
moreover
high
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social
activities can
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improve
success on the
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job
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in addition to good qualification for job success. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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