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Most economic systems work to maximize the use of limited resources, often without great attention to the harmful effects such use may have. Sustainability relates to the management of resources to limit the negative impact placed on the environment (our v.1

Most economic systems work to maximize the use of limited resources, often without great attention to the harmful effects such use may have. Sustainability relates to the management of resources to limit the negative impact placed on the environment (our v. 1
Employees if given longer vacations from the employers will motivate them to perform well in their job. This essay strongly agrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will first, it will help to reduce the stress level of the employees and further, it will outline that employees will become more efficient and effective. It is clear that if employers will give the opportunity to the workforce to take longer holidays it will help to reduce the level of anxiety and stress. This is to say, employees are under tremendous pressure to complete the work within the deadline, thus allowing them to go on vacations with their families will help them to rejuvenate. As a result, once they will return to work they will be more energetic and active in performing their duties. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed that more than 80 percent of the employees when given long holidays perform more actively in the organisation. Apart from this, giving long vacations for the employees will increase the productivity level of the organisation. In other words, employees returning after long vacations will perform their task efficaciously, with minimal scope of errors and mistakes. As a consequence, this will help in increasing the production capacity of the company. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times showed that organisations productivity increases by 75 percent if its employees are given long holidays. To conclude, the management must give long vacations to their employees as it will not only helps them to relieve from depression and stress, but will also help to perform their tasks with more effectiveness and accuracy.
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perform
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help
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stress
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and
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, it will outline that
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employees
will become more efficient and effective.

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clear
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help
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reduce
the level of anxiety and
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stress
. This is to say,
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employees
are under tremendous pressure to complete the work within the deadline,
thus
allowing them to go on
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vacations
with their families will
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help
them to rejuvenate.
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showed
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Apart from this, giving
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for the
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will increase the productivity level of the
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,
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efficaciously
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help
in increasing the production capacity of the
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company
. To exemplify, a recent study conducted by The New York Times
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showed
that
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productivity increases by 75 percent if its
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long
holidays.

To conclude
, the management
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vacations
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as it will not
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IELTS essay Most economic systems work to maximize the use of limited resources, often without great attention to the harmful effects such use may have. Sustainability relates to the management of resources to limit the negative impact placed on the environment (our v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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