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In the request for development, many countries allow their natural environment to be affected. Such a strategy is well worthwhile, and economic development should always be placed ahead of the environment. Argue both sides, and give your opinion. v.1

In the request for development, many countries allow their natural environment to be affected. Such a strategy is well worthwhile, and economic development should always be placed ahead of the environment. Argue both sides, and give your opinion. v. 1
The past decades have seen many countries strived for economic growth which took a heavy toll on the environment. Some maintain that environment should be placed ahead of economic growth. I similarly believe this, and my reasons are twofold. First of all, it is undeniable that over exploitation came a cost of climate change with growing carbon emission. Extreme weather has contributed to disastrous ruins in several places. One obvious example of this is a fire in Australia - the fire lasted for a few months, millions acres engulfed by the blade, and millions residents evacuated. Thus, it is pressing that certain policies should be made for government in term of environmental protection. Admittedly, entrepreneurs often claim that environmental protection to certain extend confines development greatly for those developing countries. For instance, Paris agreement constrained carbon emission; thus, several countries raise expenditure to reduce a dependence on fossil fuel. However, in view of both development and our environment, it seems that those actions are necessary and urgent. Equally essential to environmental protection is the preservation of endangered animals. One compelling example of this is can be seen in polar bear; additionally, some researches predicted that polar bear will be wiped out within a few decades. By way of conclusion, in terms of next generation, environment protection and preservation outweigh the economic exploitation, although it is necessary to increase funding on those practices.
The past decades have
seen
many
countries strived for economic growth which took a heavy toll on the
environment
.
Some
maintain that
environment
should
be placed
ahead of economic growth. I
similarly
believe this, and my reasons are twofold.

First of all
, it is undeniable that over exploitation came a cost of climate
change
with growing carbon emission. Extreme weather has contributed to disastrous ruins in several places. One obvious example of this is a fire in Australia
-
the fire lasted for a few months, millions acres engulfed by the blade, and millions residents evacuated.
Thus
, it is pressing that certain policies should
be made
for
government
in term of environmental protection.

Admittedly
, entrepreneurs
often
claim that environmental protection to certain
extend
confines development
greatly
for those
developing countries
.
For instance
, Paris agreement constrained carbon emission;
thus
, several countries raise expenditure to
reduce
a dependence on fossil fuel.
However
, in view of both development and our
environment
, it seems that those actions are necessary and urgent.
Equally
essential to environmental protection is the preservation of endangered animals. One compelling example of this is can be
seen
in polar bear;
additionally
,
some
researches predicted that polar bear will
be wiped
out within a few decades.

By way of conclusion, in terms of
next
generation,
environment
protection and preservation outweigh the economic exploitation, although it is necessary to increase funding on those practices.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In the request for development, many countries allow their natural environment to be affected. Such a strategy is well worthwhile, and economic development should always be placed ahead of the environment. Argue both sides, and give your opinion. v. 1

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