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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy Do you agree or disagree To what extent do you agree v.1

Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy 1
Nowadays, global warming is a hot topic to discuss. Human behaviour towards development in the sense of technology, pesticide, chemicals are affecting all the species on the globe, either animals or plants. One side people have an opinion that we cannot modify it while on the other side, few have a trust that they can bring a change with taking necessary steps. Unlikely to one side, I totally agree with others, that there are lot of things which we can do to bring awareness among the people. Firstly, In the race of innovation, human have been forgetting that their different inventions are affecting the creature on the globe, according to them, which they cannot control. Especially, Mills, factories, plastic bags and pollution, which are non-sustainable resources are destroying the environment for the animals and plants. For instant, factory smoke and chemical water cause air and water pollution. Which is harmful to sea habitats. Moreover, deforming the trees brings the least amount of carbon dioxide, which is a hazard sign for the species who lives in the forest or for a whole globe, However, there is still some change which we can make with the help of the government, by taking some essential steps. Some people have a point of view banning the production of plastic bags, and by stopping hunting the animals just for pleasant ourselves also by avoiding to throw the trash outside the bins and inside the seawater we can safe many species, Like, we can grow different plants, greenery, if we produce 96% of Co2 on the globe we will save the earth. Furthermore, We can also participate in different ENGOs and Foundations whose motto is to save the environment. To Sum up, still, it’s not too much lately, we can save the environment by changing the way how our lives. We have to take some essential steps to stop the crucial activities of humans.
Nowadays, global warming is a hot topic to discuss. Human
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
towards development in the sense of technology, pesticide, chemicals are affecting all the species on the globe, either animals or plants. One side
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have an opinion that we cannot modify it while on the other side, few have a trust that they can bring a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
with taking necessary steps. Unlikely to one side, I
totally
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agree
with others, that there are lot of things which we can do to bring awareness among the
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people
.

Firstly
, In the race of innovation, human have been forgetting that their
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
inventions are affecting the creature on the globe, according to them, which they cannot control.
Especially
, Mills, factories, plastic bags and pollution, which are non-sustainable resources are destroying the environment for the animals and plants. For instant, factory smoke and chemical water cause air and water pollution.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
is harmful to sea habitats.
Moreover
, deforming the trees brings the least amount of carbon dioxide, which is a hazard
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sign
for the species who
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lives
in the forest or for a whole globe,

However
, there is
still
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some
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change
which we can
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make
with the
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help
of the
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government
, by taking
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some
essential steps.
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Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have a point of view banning the production of plastic bags, and by stopping hunting the animals
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for pleasant ourselves
also
by
The verb 'avoiding' is used with the gerund form: "avoiding throwing".
avoiding to throw
the trash outside the bins and inside the seawater we can
The word "safe" is an adjective. Did you mean the verb "save"?
safe
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many
species, Like, we can grow
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different
plants, greenery, if we produce 96% of Co2 on the globe we will save the earth.
Furthermore
, We can
also
participate in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
Possible spelling mistake found.
ENGOs
and Foundations whose motto is to save the environment.

To Sum up,
still
, it’s not too much lately, we can save the environment by changing the way how our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. We
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
essential steps to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the crucial activities of humans.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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