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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.9

More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 9
Nowadays the percentage of people, which want to have a child in their middle age is rising. This essay will discuss the reasons why it occurs and will provide arguments for its advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion the rise in the rate of people, who decided to have children in their later age than in the past is due to reason: desire to build stronger financial bases for future family. More young people realize that to carry about children and provide them with all necessary needs are not cheap and all this thing requires a sustainable financial source. That is why a lot of people try firstly to build a successful career, which results in forming a strong financial basement and only after that to plan a child. For example, a lot of Russian survey's results demonstrate that the lack of enough money is the main reason of delaying of planning children. There are advantages and disadvantages of this statement. From one point of view, it is better to have a child in more wealthy conditions because all our and child's demand would be satisfied. For instance, to take care of children and provide them with a quality access to all necessary services, which impact on their development, require a lot of financial investments. On the other hand it is bad to have children in later age because of physical opportunities for mothers. Childbirth is a strong stress on women's health and according to evolution from year to year women's body does not become younger and stronger for bringing a birth of a baby. For instance, there are many cases when children of middle aged women were born with some physical disabilities. In my personal opinion, advantages of late planning kid outweigh disadvantages due to modern human demands. Moreover, medicine's achievements allow women to solve their physical problems. Summarizing the ideas mentioned above it has become clear that there are advantages and disadvantages of late planning children and the main reason of this is desired to make a confident financial base.
Nowadays the percentage of
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people
, which want to have a child in their middle age is rising. This essay will discuss the
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reasons
why it occurs and will provide arguments for its
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advantages
and disadvantages.

In my opinion the rise in the rate of
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people
, who decided to have
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children
in their later age than in the past is due to
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reason
: desire to build stronger
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financial
bases for future family. More young
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people
realize that to carry about
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children
and provide them with all necessary needs are not
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cheap
and all this thing requires a sustainable
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financial
source.
That is
why
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a lot of
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people
try
firstly
to build a successful career, which results in forming a strong
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financial
basement and
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only
after that to plan a child.
For example
,
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a lot of
Russian survey's results demonstrate that the lack of
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enough
money is the main
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reason
of delaying of planning children.

There are
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advantages
and disadvantages of this statement. From one point of view, it is better to have a child in more wealthy conditions
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because
all our and child's demand would
be satisfied
.
For instance
, to take care of
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children
and provide them with
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a quality access
to all necessary services, which impact on their development, require
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a lot of
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financial
investments.

On the other hand
it is
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bad
to have
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children
in later age
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because
of physical opportunities for mothers. Childbirth is a strong
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stress
on women's health and according to evolution from year to year women's body does not become younger and stronger for bringing a birth of a baby.
For instance
, there are
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many
cases when
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children
of
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middle aged
women
were born
with
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some
physical disabilities.

In my personal opinion,
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advantages
of late planning kid outweigh disadvantages due to modern human demands.
Moreover
, medicine's achievements
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allow
women to solve their physical problems.

Summarizing the
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ideas
mentioned above it has become
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clear
that there are
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advantages
and disadvantages of late planning
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children
and the main
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reason
of this
is desired
to
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make
a confident
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financial
base.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 9

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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