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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 5
Among the various changes we are encountering daily between the previous and recent times, is the new mindset that prefers to have offsprings in an older age. This shall have some pros and cons but are these merits enough to take such decision or not? In the past, women, whether educated they have been or not, were accustomed to getting married at her early 20s ages and directly have a baby on her bare hands just after one year of marriage. Since the life at such moments have been much easier, cheaper with less needs, for instance, one would only aim to send his child to a considerate school. To put it in another way, no luxurious requirements, unlike nowadays, as participating in a well-known club for different trainings and exercises or going out for costy trips frequently. Meanwhile, no much concentration was given to the way of raising children properly, but just in a similar method that this young mother has been brought up even if it was a false way of raising. Nevertheless, at the recent moments, people are paying more attention to this issue regarding marriage and children. Should they be able to offer a relatively high standard of living to their children or not has become a serious concern that mostly yields to postponing the intention of having children just after marriage. For example, having a man in a relationship but never take a forward step until his savings reach to a couple of hundred thousands, this may last to up to 7 years. Despite being more immersed in work and practical life, youth are now frowning of taking a huge responsibility as marriage and bringing up children. Whilst these may not be positive reasons, a one crucial aspect is the delicate focus on how children are raised in order to supply them with proper mentality and spirit. For this specific purpose, I would greatly argue that the benefits of having children in older years exceeds its drawbacks. In conclusion, to have children and bring them up properly is not easy matter, so the society is tending, conversely with the past, to do so at the most suitable age, which happens to be an older one. Many reasons for such way of thinking including mainly getting stable humans, for that in my view point, I think the strengths of this decision overcomes its weaknesses.
Among the various
changes
we are encountering daily between the previous and recent times, is the new mindset that prefers to have
offsprings
in an older age. This shall have
some
pros and cons
but
are these merits
enough
to take such decision or not?

In the past, women, whether educated they have been or not,
were accustomed
to getting married at her early 20s ages and
directly
have a baby on her bare hands
just
after one year of
marriage
. Since the life at such moments have been much easier, cheaper with
less
needs,
for instance
, one would
only
aim to
send
his child to a considerate school. To put it in another way, no luxurious requirements, unlike nowadays, as participating in a well-known club for
different
trainings and exercises or going out for
costy
trips
frequently
. Meanwhile,
no
much concentration was
given
to the way of raising
children
properly
,
but
just
in a similar method that this young mother has
been brought
up even if it was a false way of raising.

Nevertheless
, at the recent moments,
people
are paying more attention to this issue regarding
marriage
and
children
. Should they be able to offer a
relatively
high standard of living to their
children
or not has become a serious concern that
mostly
yields to postponing the intention of having
children
just
after
marriage
.
For example
, having a
man
in a relationship
but
never take a forward step until his savings reach to a couple of hundred thousands, this may last to up to 7 years. Despite being more immersed in work and practical life, youth are
now
frowning of taking a huge responsibility as
marriage
and bringing up
children
. Whilst these may not be
positive
reasons, a one crucial aspect is the delicate focus on how
children
are raised
in order to supply them with proper mentality and spirit. For this specific purpose, I would
greatly
argue that the benefits of having
children
in older years exceeds its drawbacks.

In conclusion
, to have
children
and bring them up
properly
is not easy matter,
so
the society is tending,
conversely
with the past, to do
so
at the most suitable age, which happens to be an older one.
Many
reasons for such way of thinking including
mainly
getting stable humans, for that in my view point, I
think
the strengths of this decision overcomes its weaknesses.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
398 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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