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More people decide to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v.1

More people decide to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
The world population is increasing drastically now a days. Having kids at what age is their own concern, but most of the couples are now deciding to have kids in their later stage of the alliance than in the past. There are so many advantages and disadvantages, but in my opinion, plan a kid after a certain period, say 2 to 3 years of marriage is good decision. In India, responsibilities of kids, all are bare by the parents and due to that, it is advisable to have a kid after 2 to 3 years of wedlock is a good decision. During this period, the couple can spend more time with their partner, enjoy the life without any responsibility and they can roam around the word. Opposite to this if they intent a kids soon after a marriage than they have to be ready for the responsibilities of a baby coming to the world and have to be more careful and take care. Whereas if your intention of a child in your old age, say after 45, it would be problematic, especially for the women, as chances of getting pregnant are very less. Also in India, parents have to make sure that their baby should be well set while they are in the world and hence if you plan a juvenile in dotage, maybe at your retirement or in your old age, your toddler could be pursued in 12th or collage. So it's advisable to have kids after 2 to 3 years of merger is a good decision.
The world population is increasing
drastically
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now a days
. Having
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kids
at what age is their
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own
concern,
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but
most of the couples are
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now
deciding to have
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kids
in their later stage of the alliance than in the past. There are
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so
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many
advantages and disadvantages,
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but
in my opinion, plan a
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kid
after a certain period, say 2 to 3 years of marriage is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
decision.

In India, responsibilities of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
, all are bare by the parents and due to that, it is advisable to have a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kid
after 2 to 3 years of wedlock is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
decision. During this period, the couple can spend more time with their partner, enjoy the life without any
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responsibility and
they can roam around the word. Opposite to this if they intent a
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kids
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soon
after a marriage than they
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have to
be ready for the responsibilities of a baby coming to the world and
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have to
be more careful and take care.

Whereas if your intention of a child in your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age, say after 45, it would be problematic,
especially
for the women, as chances of getting pregnant are
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very
less.
Also
in India, parents
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have to
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make
sure that their baby should be well set while they are in the world and
hence
if you plan a juvenile in dotage, maybe at your retirement or in your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age, your toddler could
be pursued
in 12th or collage.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it's advisable to have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kids
after 2 to 3 years of merger is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
decision.
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IELTS essay More people decide to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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