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more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on endangered list. what are the reasons? What can be done? v.2

more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on endangered list. what are the reasons? What can be done? v. 2
Nowadays, unfortunately, wild animals are not as common as in the past. Indeed, they are on the brink of extinction or generally in danger. There are several reasons which are causing this process. One of this is hunting, in some countries is illegal (and prohibited). Nevertheless, many people break the law, causing the death of wild animals. Another reason is pollution, which kills animals in general, but also it generates Climate Change which influence all the environment around the wildlife. Moreover, it causes also fires, one recent example is the big fire which hit Australian nature, now. Unfortunately, it’s killing hundreds of animals and destroying wonderful forests of Australia. Consequently, after having figured out the causes, it’s needed to find solutions and to act in order to stop or even slow down the process. One solution can be reducing the amount of pollution we generate by using less plastic and cars. It is possible by moving on foot or by public transportation. Another solution to pollute less is to become vegan or vegetarian, or if it’s too difficult or extreme it’s helpful for the planet to eat less meat, too. One last solution is to go against people who practice hunting by controlling more and generally protecting wild animals. In conclusion, the extinction of wild animals is produced by hunting, pollution which generates global warming. For this reason, some solutions can be to consume less meat, preserving the animals and enforcing the laws. I think that everyone should do something to help the planet even a small act, because Earth is our home and the only one we own/have.
Nowadays, unfortunately, wild
animals
are not as common as in the past.
Indeed
, they are on the brink of extinction or
generally
in
danger
.

There are several reasons which are causing this process. One of this is hunting, in
some
countries is illegal (and prohibited).
Nevertheless
,
many
people
break the law, causing the death of wild animals.

Another reason is pollution, which kills
animals
in general
,
but
also
it generates Climate
Change
which influence all the environment around the wildlife.
Moreover
, it causes
also
fires, one recent example is the
big
fire which hit Australian nature,
now
. Unfortunately, it’s killing hundreds of
animals
and destroying wonderful forests of Australia.

Consequently
, after having figured out the causes, it’s needed to find
solutions
and to act in order to
stop
or even slow down the process. One
solution
can be reducing the amount of pollution we generate by using
less
plastic and cars. It is possible by moving on foot or by public transportation. Another
solution
to pollute
less
is to become vegan or vegetarian, or if it’s too difficult or extreme it’s helpful for the planet to eat
less
meat, too. One last
solution
is to go against
people
who practice hunting by controlling more and
generally
protecting wild animals.

In conclusion
, the extinction of wild
animals
is produced
by hunting, pollution which generates global warming.
For this reason
,
some
solutions
can be to consume
less
meat, preserving the
animals
and enforcing the laws. I
think
that everyone should do something to
help
the planet even a
small
act,
because
Earth is our home and the
only
one we
own
/have.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay more and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on endangered list. what are the reasons? What can be done? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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