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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can beextremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How cangovernments make urban life better for everyone? v.2

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can beextremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How cangovernments make urban life better for everyone? v. 2
Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant. The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful. However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities. In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.
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as places of opportunity,
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governments
could do much more to
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improve
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city


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life
for the average inhabitant.

The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is

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likely
to be much higher than it is in a
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small
town or village. Inhabitants of
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cities
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have to
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pay


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higher
prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend
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to


suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates
in comparison
with rural

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areas
.
Furthermore
, the air quality in
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cities
is
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often
poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the

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streets
and public transport systems are
usually
overcrowded.
As a result
, city life can
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be


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unhealthy
and stressful.

However
, there are various steps that
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governments
could take to tackle these problems.

Firstly
, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to
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reduce
the

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cost
of living.
Secondly
, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city
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centres
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promote the
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use
of cleaner public transport, which would
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help
to
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reduce
both air pollution

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and
traffic congestion. In London,
for example
, the introduction of a congestion charge
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for


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drivers
has
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helped
to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop
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provincial


towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to
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reduce
the

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pressure
on major cities.

In conclusion
,
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governments
could
certainly
implement a range of measures to enhance the

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quality
of life for all city residents.
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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can beextremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How cangovernments make urban life better for everyone? v. 2

Essay
  American English
20 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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