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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v.6

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 6
Cities are often seen as a place of opportunity, but there are some drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, the government could influence to improve city life for the inhabitant. We should to begin with that the main problem for anyone who migrate to a large city is the cost of living. The quality of life in city is much more expensive than it is in a small town or a village. So that you have to pay higher prices for housing or transport. As a housing is much more expensive, that lead to homelessness is becoming more common in cities and the large number of cars cause traffic jam, the air quality is poor and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy. Secondly, it is the constant noise of cars and people who lived in rural areas they are not used to noise. Another drawback of living in a city is the social classification and it is as a result social problems such as high crime and poverty rates. However, governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing. Also, politicians should build tracks for the bike, which would help to reduce air pollution and traffic congestion. A second option would be to develop jobs in village regions. In conclusion, the government should improve village living and have a job opportunity to reduce the pressure on cities.
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seen
as a place of opportunity,
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there are
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some
drawbacks of
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living
in a large metropolis. In my opinion, the
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government
could influence to
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improve
city life for the inhabitant.

We should to
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begin
with that the main problem for anyone who migrate to a large city is the cost of
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living
. The quality of life in city is much more expensive than it is in a
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small
town or a village.
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So
that you
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have to
pay higher prices for housing or transport. As a housing is much more expensive, that lead to homelessness is becoming more common in
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cities
and the large number of cars cause traffic jam, the air quality is poor and public transport systems are
usually
overcrowded.
As a result
, city life can be unhealthy.
Secondly
, it is the constant noise of cars and
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people
who
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lived
in rural areas they are not
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used
to noise. Another drawback of
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living
in a city is the social classification and it is
as a result
social problems such as high crime and poverty rates.

However
,
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governments
could take to tackle these problems.
Firstly
, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing.
Also
, politicians should build
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tracks
for the bike, which would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
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reduce
air pollution and traffic congestion. A second option would be to develop jobs in village regions.

In conclusion
, the
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government
should
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improve
village
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living
and have a job opportunity to
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reduce
the pressure on
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cities
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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