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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v.4

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 4
In recent times, migration is becoming more popular. It is now common for people to leave rural for urban regions, however, life in the city is extremely demanding. In this essay, I will discuss the difficulties associated with living in the metropolis and the possible ways in which the government can intervene. The major problem of town dwellers is unemployment. This is because there are few resources available for the increasing population. As a result of this, youths are left with nothing to do, thereby turning to criminal activities which is dangerous to the society. In addition, another issue facing megacities is poor living conditions. It is common to see citizens living in small, dilapidated houses with little or no ventilation which can pose a high risk to health. Although the problems of living in towns are numerous, there are some steps which the government can take to curb them. Firstly, developing the villages and suburbs will reduce the influx of migrants into urban areas, leading to a reduction of issues caused by overpopulation. Furthermore, provision of low-cost housings will go a long way to ensure that people have more conducive and healthy living conditions. Finally, more job opportunities as well as an enabling business environment for entrepreneurs should be provided. This will solve the issues of unemployment and increased crime rate. To conclude, in spite of the burdensome nature of city life migration to towns is on the rise. While there are many difficulties faced by inhabitants of urban regions, the government has ways which they can intervene.
In recent times, migration is becoming more popular. It is
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now
common for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
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leave
rural for urban regions,
however
, life in the city is
extremely
demanding. In this essay, I will discuss the difficulties associated with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
in the metropolis and the possible ways in which the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can intervene.

The major problem of town dwellers is unemployment. This is
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because
there are few resources available for the increasing population.
As a result
of this, youths are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
with nothing to do, thereby turning to criminal activities which is
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dangerous
to the society.
In addition
, another issue facing
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megacities
is poor
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living
conditions. It is common to
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see
citizens
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living
in
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small
, dilapidated
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houses
with
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little
or no ventilation which can pose a high
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risk
to health.

Although the problems of
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living
in towns are numerous, there are
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some
steps which the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can take to curb them.
Firstly
, developing the villages and suburbs will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the influx of migrants into urban areas, leading to a reduction of issues caused by overpopulation.
Furthermore
, provision of low-cost housings will go a long way to ensure that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have more conducive and healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
living
conditions.
Finally
, more job opportunities
as well
as an enabling business environment for entrepreneurs should
be provided
. This will solve the issues of unemployment and increased crime rate.

To conclude
,
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in spite of
the burdensome nature of city life migration to towns is on the rise. While there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
difficulties faced by inhabitants of urban regions, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has ways which they can intervene.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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