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Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 3
These days computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. So some people think that the computer is the most important invention of the last hundred years, while others believe that mobile phones are the important invention of the last hundred years. This essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion. On one hand computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years because a variety of people have it and handling it in their daily life whether it is at work or personal usage. For example, I need my computer to get my emails every day and finish my assignments at school. So, that is why some think that computers is the most important invention of the last hundred years. On the other hand, some people believe that mobile phones are the important invention of the last hundred years due to our everyday benefit and how we communicate with each other. To clarify, my mum need her phone to check upon my brother whose in another country while she's with me. hence the belief that most people have two to three mobile phones in their house. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views, I believe that mobile phones are the important invention of the last hundred years now that is way smaller than a computer and more convenient and after all it is up to the person whether he thinks a mobile phone is the most important invention of the last hundred years or a computer.
These days computers are
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that the computer is the most
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invention of the last hundred years. This essay will discuss both sides and will draw my personal conclusion.

On one hand computers are
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often
argued to be the most
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important
invention of the last hundred years
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because
a variety of
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people
have it and handling it in their daily life whether it is at work or personal usage.
For example
, I need my computer to
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my emails every day and finish my assignments at school.
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why
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that computers is the most
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invention of the last hundred years.

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believe that mobile
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are the
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important
invention of the last hundred years due to our everyday benefit and how we communicate with each other. To clarify, my mum need her
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phone
to
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check
upon my brother whose in another country while she's with me.
hence
the belief that most
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people
have two to three mobile
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phones
in their
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house
.

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, after a careful analysis of both point views, I believe that mobile
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phones
are the
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important
invention of the last hundred years
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now
that is
way smaller than a computer and more convenient and
after all
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a mobile
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is the most
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invention of the last hundred years or a computer.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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