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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the price of fast foods will solve the problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.11

More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the price of fast foods will solve the problems. v. 11
Obesity is becoming a major issue of the present time because numerous folks are reported as obese due to unusual eating habits. Certain people believe that, if the cost of junk will increase there will be declined in number of junk food consumers, thus, this how the problem will resolve. This essay will 70% concur with the above notion, but rest 30% not sure due to people's attitude, therefore, following essay will discuss how the increasing cost affects the number of people's eating habits and secondly, why some individual does not concern about the cost. On the one hand, primarily, the high price of fast food inhibits people from eating due to financial imbalance which can be affected by the wasting money on the unnecessary things. As a result, one would prefer to have home-made healthy cuisine rather than junk food. Hence, their life would become more fit and fine. For example, our forefathers had lived more than 80 years and their average life expectancy was 60 due to healthy and home-made cuisine. On the other hand, few folks do not care whether the price of the junk meals is rising or not, as far as they are happy and love to eat those kind of food. This is due to their wrong nurturing where their lack of information about the health and future problem by their guardian. For instance, a UK health department study has shown that 70% of children are unaware since childhood about the importance of fitness and thus they continue to eat random cuisine which satisfy their cravings. However, this kind of people are less in number or maybe they are rich so that they can afford it. In conclusion, As far as I can see, I do not think so, more than 30% people continue to eat unhealthy meals, because of the inflation. Nevertheless, if the government takes some actions toward the awareness program, then I definitely believe that there ill be a reduction in overweight problem.
Obesity is becoming a major issue of the present time
because
numerous folks
are reported
as obese
due
to unusual eating habits. Certain
people
believe that, if the cost of
junk
will increase there will
be declined
in number of
junk
food
consumers,
thus
, this how the problem will resolve. This essay will 70% concur with the above notion,
but
rest 30% not sure
due
to
people
's attitude,
therefore
, following essay will discuss how the increasing cost affects the number of
people
's eating habits and
secondly
, why
some
individual does not concern about the cost.

On the one hand,
primarily
, the high price of
fast
food
inhibits
people
from eating
due
to financial imbalance which can be
affected
by the wasting money on the unnecessary things.
As a result
, one would prefer to have home-made healthy cuisine
rather
than
junk
food
.
Hence
, their life would become more fit and fine.
For example
, our forefathers had
lived
more than 80 years and their average life expectancy was 60
due
to healthy and home-made cuisine.

On the other hand
, few folks do not care whether the price of the
junk
meals is rising or not, as far as they are happy and
love
to eat
those kind
of
food
. This is
due
to their
wrong
nurturing where their lack of information about the health and future problem by their guardian.
For instance
, a UK health department study has shown that 70% of children are unaware since childhood about the importance of fitness and
thus
they continue to eat random cuisine which satisfy their cravings.
However
, this kind of
people
are
less in number
or maybe they are rich
so
that they can afford it.

In conclusion
, As far as I can
see
, I do not
think
so
, more than 30%
people
continue to eat unhealthy meals,
because
of the inflation.
Nevertheless
, if the
government
takes
some
actions toward the awareness program, then I definitely believe that there ill be a reduction in overweight problem.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that raising the price of fast foods will solve the problems. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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