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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.1

More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1
Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Economic growth is the key of living standards and improving quality of life. For some countries, the economic evolution is a vital goal for government power. However, it is thought that there are other types of progress that are equally crucial for a nation. Below, the gravity of economic advancement and other developments for a ministry will be discussed. On the one hand, economic expansion is one of the most powerful instruments in poverty reduction. Moreover, improving by an economic growth lead to being wealthy in the country. For instance, some newly developed Asian countries have been improving through several investments, as well as, the status of the population is also getting improved because of earning adequate finance. Furthermore, economic development influences on social soul. For example, the employees who can earn money from their career pay more attention to their health, education and entertainment activities. As a result, the rate of idlers may be declined. On the other hand, there are numerous factors which are pivotal in union`s heart. Additionally, the environmental issue is experienced every day by individuals, whereas, politics only see the numbers. For example, in African countries, especially in undeveloped areas, people meet seasonal drought in their daily growth. Thus, the regime should pay attention to these problems and try to solve through several factors. Likewise, educational progress has a pivotal role in law worldwide. In fact, when authority prioritise the improvement of the education system, it will produce professional masters who secure well-paying jobs. They will provide a good on investment in the country. Finally, economic process and other types of progresses should be equal, because development is not only result of improving on the aspect of the nation, but also requirement of various aspects of life.
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for a country.

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improving
quality of life. For
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some
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countries
, the
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evolution is a vital goal for
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government
power.
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, it is
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thought
that there are
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other
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progress
that are
equally
crucial for a nation. Below, the gravity of
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economic
advancement and
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other
developments for a ministry will
be discussed
.

On the one hand,
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economic
expansion is one of the most powerful instruments in poverty reduction.
Moreover
,
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improving
by an
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economic
growth lead to being wealthy in the
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country
.
For instance
,
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some
newly
developed Asian
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countries
have been
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improving
through several investments,
as well
as, the status of the population is
also
getting
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improved
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because
of earning adequate finance.
Furthermore
,
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economic
development influences on social soul.
For example
, the employees who can earn money from their career pay more attention to their health, education and entertainment activities.
As a result
, the rate of idlers may
be declined
.

On the
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other
hand, there are numerous factors which are pivotal in
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heart.
Additionally
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is experienced
every day by individuals, whereas, politics
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the numbers.
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, in African
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countries
,
especially
in undeveloped areas,
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people
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meet
seasonal drought in their daily growth.
Thus
, the regime should pay attention to these problems and try to solve through several factors.
Likewise
, educational
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progress
has a pivotal role in law worldwide. In fact, when authority
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prioritise
the improvement of the education system, it will produce professional masters who secure well-paying jobs. They will provide a
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good
on investment in the country.

Finally
,
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economic
process and
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other
types of
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progresses
should be equal,
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because
development is not
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only
result of
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improving
on the aspect of the nation,
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but
also
requirement of various aspects of life.
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IELTS essay More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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