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Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity v. 2
There is no doubt that governments should protect cultural heritage. According to, some people are of the view that there should be an obligation to construct new buildings based on traditional style. It seems to me that it is not logical and this essay will provide evidence as to why new buildings are more beneficial. There are several reasons made people avoid building their houses like the past form. First and foremost, new materials provide many benefits in terms of quality and quantity. For example, new buildings are made by a little amount of cement are stronger in comparison with the old building are needed a large amount of adobe. Secondly, educating in the construction field and raising awareness help engineers to reduce the effect of dangers phenomena like earthquakes on buildings. It leads apartments and houses to become more safe and convenient for living. Finally, nowadays, people have a tendency to have modern-designed houses. Indeed, the new style of buildings gives them an opportunity to experience the new lease of life. As a result, to be modern not only is residential area high-standard but also people feel appealing inside there. While it may be correct to say that modern buildings would cause disappear the traditional architecture, it should be considered that the strength of houses is far more superior. Overall, it can be said that although the government should preserve the cultural values, it is not reasonable to follow the poor structure of the traditional style. I completely disagree with this idea because new buildings are far better than the old ones in terms of aesthetics and stability.
There is no doubt that
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governments
should protect cultural heritage. According to,
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some
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people
are of the view that there should be an obligation to construct
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new
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buildings
based on traditional style. It seems to me that it is not logical and this essay will provide evidence as to why
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new
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buildings
are more beneficial.

There are several reasons made
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people
avoid
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building
their
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houses
like the past form.
First
and foremost,
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new
materials provide
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many
benefits in terms of quality and quantity.
For example
,
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new
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buildings
are made
by a
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little
amount of cement are stronger
in comparison
with the
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old
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building
are needed
a large amount of adobe.
Secondly
, educating in the construction field and raising awareness
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help
engineers to
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reduce
the effect of
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dangers
phenomena like earthquakes on
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buildings
. It leads apartments and
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houses
to become more safe and convenient for living.
Finally
, nowadays,
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people
have a tendency to have modern-designed
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houses
.
Indeed
, the
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new
style of
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buildings
gives them an opportunity to experience the
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new
lease of life.
As a result
, to be modern not
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only
is residential area high-standard
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but
also
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people
feel appealing inside there.

While it may be correct to say that modern
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buildings
would cause disappear the traditional architecture, it should
be considered
that the strength of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
is far more superior.

Overall
, it can
be said
that although the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should preserve the cultural values, it is not reasonable to follow the poor structure of the traditional style. I completely disagree with this
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idea
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
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new
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buildings
are far better than the
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old
ones in terms of aesthetics and stability.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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