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Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. v.2

Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. v. 2
With the rapid development of architectural advancements and the dramatic increase in modernization, many countries have allowed constructing more and more modern buildings that have created significant changes in character and appearance of the living areas. In my opinion, this is unlikely to deteriorate culture and the suggestion that new high-rise buildings should follow the traditional styles in order to maintain culture identity is not persuasive. There is no denying the fact that buildings erected in modern and unique designs and equipped with more advanced amenities will partly make a professional and active look for a city or town, which both facilitates higher living standards of the locals and draws attention to wealthy tourists or potential investors who are seeking for lucrative markets to develop their business. When the government implement the open policies for its cities and towns to construct modern buildings, many companies are more likely to rent more rooms, offices or apartments so as to place their branches, stores or even head offices. This will promisingly accelerate the local economy. With the intention to protect cultural identity, the government can take consideration into more practical ways rather than insist the traditional styles for new buildings. Regular repairs or refurbishment for historical and old buildings, for instance, may be a good idea to keep the country's cultural values alive longer. It is those sites that reflect more actual traditions of towns and cities than new ones built in the so-called traditional styles which people cannot ensure if they have been inherited properly from the previous to present builder generation. In conclusion, modern buildings are obvious results of the constant progress in construction techniques and the economic development of residential regions. The government should encourage building more high-rise buildings to satisfy its inhabitants' higher demands on hi-tech facilities as well as invest effectively in repairing old buildings to conserve traditional values.
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many
countries have
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allowed
constructing more and more
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modern
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buildings
that have created significant
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changes
in character and appearance of the living areas. In my opinion, this is unlikely to deteriorate culture and the suggestion that new high-rise
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buildings
should follow the
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traditional
styles in order to maintain culture identity is not persuasive.

There is no denying the fact that
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buildings
erected in
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modern
and unique designs and equipped with more advanced amenities will partly
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make
a professional and active look for a city or town, which both facilitates higher living standards of the locals and draws attention to wealthy tourists or potential investors who are seeking for lucrative markets to develop their business. When the
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government
implement the open policies for its cities and towns to construct
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modern
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buildings
,
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many
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companies
are more likely to rent more rooms, offices or apartments
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so as to
place their branches, stores or even head offices. This will
promisingly
accelerate the local economy.

With the intention to protect cultural identity, the
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government
can take consideration into more practical ways
rather
than insist the
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traditional
styles for new
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buildings
. Regular repairs or refurbishment for historical and
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old
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buildings
,
for instance
, may be a
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good
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idea
to
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keep
the country's cultural values alive longer. It is those sites that reflect more actual traditions of towns and cities than new ones built in the
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so
-called
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traditional
styles which
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people
cannot ensure if they have
been inherited
properly
from the previous to present builder generation.

In conclusion
,
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modern
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buildings
are obvious results of the constant progress in construction techniques and the economic development of residential regions. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should encourage
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building
more high-rise
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buildings
to satisfy its inhabitants' higher demands on hi-tech facilities
as well
as invest
effectively
in repairing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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buildings
to conserve
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traditional
values.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern buildings change the character and appearance of towns and cities. The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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