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Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. v.3

Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. v. 3
In the modern era, Western medicine as well as alternative and conventional medicine have started to be used as widespread.  The patient's emotional and mental behaviour towards various medical treatments is taken into account when evaluating the efficiency of these healing and reformative methods. In my opinion, in recent years the world has started to switch its direction from the Western style of medical treatments to former and traditional methods. The patient's mental reaction to medicine is equally important to its physical consequences. Alternative medication has become popular again in the last 10 years. Some scientists argue that drugs which are mostly used in developed countries have some detrimental effects on human health. It is already known that they are merely reducing and curbing the symptoms but not healing the actual problem in the body. Thus, in many Eastern countries alternative approaches are preferred over the other. There are several tests and researches conducted by scientists and researchers. One of them is no doubt observing the mental behaviour after the foundation of a new medical drug. Some might have a variety of side effects on human psychology. This impact cannot be clear until tests are carried out. For example, according to the Sunday Times, a well-renowned drug which has used for at least 50 years is proved to contribute problems with regard to the functioning of the brain. In conclusion, Western cure is slowly leaving its place to traditional ways. Experts are making observations and tests for new medicines in order to see if there are any negative effects. Theseexperiments mostly focused on mental health. I believe that, the old methods are beneficial to our health. The most effective medicines are those who passed the experiments successfully.
In the modern era, Western
medicine
as well
as alternative and conventional
medicine
have
started
to be
used
as widespread.  The patient's emotional and
mental
behaviour
towards various medical treatments
is taken
into account when evaluating the efficiency of these healing and reformative methods. In my opinion, in recent years the world has
started
to switch its direction from the Western style of medical treatments to former and traditional methods. The patient's
mental
reaction to
medicine
is
equally
important
to its physical consequences.

Alternative medication has become popular again in the last 10 years.
Some
scientists argue that drugs which are
mostly
used
in
developed countries
have
some
detrimental effects on human health. It is already known that they are
merely
reducing and curbing the symptoms
but
not healing the actual problem in the body.
Thus
, in
many
Eastern countries alternative approaches
are preferred
over the other.

There are several
tests
and researches conducted by scientists and researchers. One of them is no doubt observing the
mental
behaviour
after the foundation of a new medical drug.
Some
might have a variety of side effects on human psychology. This impact cannot be
clear
until
tests
are carried
out.
For example
, according to
the Sunday Times
, a well-renowned drug which has
used
for at least 50 years
is proved
to contribute problems with regard to the functioning of the brain.

In conclusion
, Western cure is
slowly
leaving its place to traditional ways. Experts are making observations and
tests
for new medicines in order to
see
if there are any
negative
effects.
Theseexperiments
mostly
focused on
mental
health. I believe that, the
old
methods are beneficial to our health. The most effective medicines are those who passed the experiments
successfully
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Modern appliances in the home have become more common, leaving no doubt that advances in technology have improved our lifestyle. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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