In the modern world, The technology is upgrade and make life simple such as phone, we used to communicate or answer the office calls and family calls at anytime at anywhere. I think this progress and more positive effect some negative effect. Because it is very comfortable and easy way to learn. However, it ruin our relationship. In the coming paragraph I will discuss both effects.
Firstly, The mobile is a electronic gadget which makes life easier and pleasant. Because it help to communicate anywhere and we learn alot of things through this electronic device. Furthermore, it is improve our relationship such as a man who live in United kingdom, he make a call to contact with their relative. Because he do not come but he make better way to talk. Although it is the best device to earn money. For instance, nowadays, some people create a channel on YouTube and share their video with other people, it’s also earn money through steaming to sit at home.
Secondly, this electronic media have some negative effects. If we use over mean whole day this phone will be affected on our eyes and mentally health. Therefore, some people do not get information through mobile, they used to acquire bad habits. Moreover, it was cause of some unemployment. For example, before this improvement people used post office to send their documents but nowadays people use email to send their papers. These facts Make unemployment.
In conclusion, after analyze all the information I reach on my opinion these development have more positive effects compare with negative
In the modern world, The technology is upgrade and
make
life simple such as phone, we
used
to communicate or answer the office calls and family calls at anytime at anywhere. I
think
this progress and more
positive
effect
some
negative
effect
.
Because
it is
very
comfortable and easy way to learn.
However
, it
ruin
our relationship. In the coming paragraph I will discuss both effects.
Firstly
, The mobile is
a
electronic gadget which
makes
life easier and pleasant.
Because
it
help
to communicate
anywhere and
we learn
alot
of things through this electronic device.
Furthermore
, it is
improve
our relationship such as a
man
who
live
in
United kingdom
, he
make
a call to contact with their relative.
Because
he
do
not
come
but
he
make
better way to talk.
Although
it is the best device to earn money.
For instance
, nowadays,
some
people
create a channel on YouTube and share their video with other
people
, it’s
also
earn
money through steaming to sit at home.
Secondly
, this electronic media have
some
negative
effects. If we
use
over mean whole day this phone will be
affected
on our eyes and mentally health.
Therefore
,
some
people
do not
get
information through mobile, they
used
to acquire
bad
habits.
Moreover
, it was cause of
some
unemployment.
For example
,
before
this improvement
people
used
post office to
send
their documents
but
nowadays
people
use
email to
send
their papers. These facts
Make
unemployment.
In conclusion
, after analyze all the information I reach on my opinion
these development
have more
positive
effects compare with
negative
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