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Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v.4

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v. 4
Countries like America, England, Canada and Australia not only offer courses in English but also have the most talented and skilled teachers. The facilities of their universities, libraries, laboratories are undoubtedly much better than other third world countries. Furthermore, many people believe that learning English language staying in an English-speaking country is the best way and that is why lots of students move to these countries to study. There are lots of advantages in studying English. First of all, it is an international language and in most of the countries, it is either the second language or the official language. With the increasing effects of globalisation, people have to move to other countries for many reasons and in most of the cases, English is the only common language to interact with people. So for the communication people have no other choice but to learn and use English. Secondly, most of the countries use English as an official language and use it for hiring people. So to get a better job, one must be proficient in English. So to enhance the career growth, especially in a multinational organisation, one must be fluent in English. Finally, most of the books, thesis papers and internet article are either written in English language or can be found in translated into English. So to enrich someone's perspective and knowledge, one must be good at using English. In my opinion, the primary reason for English language being so prominent is because it is used in most of the countries. The English colonies were almost everywhere in the world and that has different economic, political and cultural impacts for most of the nations. English is the primary language of the technological devices and the internet and this is because the inventors or developers are mostly from those English speaking countries. If a nation wants to embrace the technology, then it has no alternatives than to learn the language first. Most of the computer software and applications are written in English.   Furthermore, with the increasing effects globalisation, people are adopting the foreign music, movies, histories, books and style. So to follow what someone's favourite singer, actor or sports personality is to follow the culture and language of this person. In conclusion, the world is considered as a single city nowadays and there must exist a common language and this common language is English. People learn this language to walk with the present trends and there is no alternative and even people prefer to learn the language from the English speaking countries and this is quite reasonable.
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like America, England, Canada and Australia not
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only
offer courses in English
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but
also
have the most talented and skilled teachers. The facilities of their universities, libraries, laboratories are
undoubtedly
much better than other third world
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countries
.
Furthermore
,
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many
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people
believe that learning English
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language
staying in an English-speaking
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country
is the best way and
that is
why lots of students
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move
to these
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countries
to study.

There are lots of advantages in studying English.
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First of all
, it is an international
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language
and in most of the
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countries
, it is either the second
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language
or the official
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language
. With the increasing effects of
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globalisation
,
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people
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have to
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move
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reasons and in most of the cases, English is the
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common
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language
to interact with
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people
.
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for the communication
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people
have no other choice
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but
to
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learn
and
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use
English.
Secondly
, most of the
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countries
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use
English as an official
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language
and
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use
it for hiring
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people
.
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to
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a better job, one
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must
be proficient in English.
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to enhance the career growth,
especially
in a multinational
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organisation
, one
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must
be fluent in English.
Finally
, most of the books, thesis papers and internet article are either written in English
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language
or can
be found
in translated into English.
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So
to enrich someone's perspective and knowledge, one
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must
be
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good
at using English.

In my opinion, the primary reason for English
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being
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so
prominent is
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because
it is
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used
in most of the
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countries
. The English colonies were almost everywhere in the world and that has
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different
economic, political and cultural impacts for most of the nations. English is the primary
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language
of the technological devices and the internet and this is
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because
the inventors or developers are
mostly
from those
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English speaking
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countries
. If a nation wants to embrace the technology, then it has no alternatives than to
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learn
the
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language
first
. Most of the computer software and applications
are written
in English.
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Furthermore
, with the increasing
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effects
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globalisation
,
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people
are adopting the foreign music, movies, histories, books and style.
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So
to follow what someone's
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favourite
singer, actor or sports personality is to follow the culture and
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language
of this person.

In conclusion
, the world
is considered
as a single city nowadays and there
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exist a common
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language
and this common
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language
is English.
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People
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learn
this
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language
to walk with the present trends and there is no alternative and even
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people
prefer to
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learn
the
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language
from the
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English speaking
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countries
and this is quite reasonable.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v. 4

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