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Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v.5

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v. 5
Nowadays, many people are travelling to English-speaking countries to continue their education. Undoubtedly, if a person wants to have a prominent career, he has to be fluent in English. England, America, Australia and Canada are the best destinations for many. It is clear that the fastest way of learning a language is to be in a country where people use this language. Otherwise, no matter how many books someone reads, he might still not be able to communicate effectively. English is used globally and could be used to interact with people. This is why this is the most powerful language in the world. As for me, I lived in London for two years. When I just got there, I was extremely disappointed, because I could hardly understand their speech, despite having studied the language at the university before. Watching original films and TV programs, communicating with people, listening to their music, I noticed how my skills improved every day. English has become a global tool of communication. 80% of all e-mails, publications and music are in English. The Olympic Games ceremonies, The UN meetings, the numerous International Awards - all of them are held in the same language. Someone cannot be a promising professional if he does not know English. Moreover, while travelling, someone feels quite confident if he knows English. Overall, a well-educated person must know a foreign language to succeed in life. This is the main reason why thousands of people move to English-speaking countries. I think this tendency is going to increase in future, as well.
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are travelling to English-speaking countries to continue their education.
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England, America, Australia and Canada are the best destinations for
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clear
that the fastest way of learning a
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language
is to be in a country where
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people
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use
this
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language
.
Otherwise
, no matter how
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many
books someone reads, he might
still
not be able to communicate
effectively
. English is
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used
globally and could be
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used
to interact with
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people
. This is why this is the most powerful
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language
in the world. As for me, I
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lived
in London for two years. When I
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just
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got
there, I was
extremely
disappointed,
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because
I could hardly understand their speech, despite having studied the
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language
at the university
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before
. Watching original films and TV programs, communicating with
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people
, listening to their music, I noticed how my
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skills
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improved
every day.

English has become a global tool of communication. 80% of all e-mails, publications and music are in English. The Olympic Games ceremonies, The UN meetings, the numerous International Awards
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-
all of them
are held
in the same
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language
. Someone cannot be a promising professional if he does not know English.
Moreover
, while travelling, someone feels quite confident if he knows English.

Overall
, a well-educated person
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must
know a foreign
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language
to succeed in life. This is the main reason why thousands of
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people
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move
to English-speaking countries. I
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think
this tendency is going to increase
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,
as well
.
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IELTS essay Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. v. 5

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4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
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