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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. v. 5
Owing to the different physical and mental abilities of men and women, it is often argued by some people that different genders are best suited for different jobs. I completely agree with this statement and will discuss it further. First and foremost, as physical abilities of both sexes are different, where men are considered to be dominant in that area and women more fragile, jobs involving more physical activities, such as lifting of heavy bodies, are best suited for men. For instance, men are expected to join the armed forces and military jobs because it involves a great amount of physical work and living in secluded places for a long time, which might be a difficult task for women as women are comparatively supple mentally and physically. Secondly, it is evident that the women are better suited for creative works such as artists and literature professors or teachers. Hence, more ratio of girls is more inclined towards studying art subjects than boys. As it is a psychologically proven fact that the part of a human brain, which controls a person’s artistic behaviour is stronger in women than men, this choice is expected. For example, 65% of the artists in the world are women, while men are just 35%. In conclusion, as men and women's bodies and brains are made differently to work in different situations, I firmly agree with the argument that they are better suited for different kinds of jobs. Therefore, men are suited for jobs involving heavy power work and women innovative and artistic jobs.
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and
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, it is
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often
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people
that
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different
genders are best
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jobs
. I completely
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agree
with this statement and will discuss it
further
.

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physical
abilities of both sexes are
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different
, where
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men
are considered
to be dominant in that area and
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women
more fragile,
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jobs
involving more
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physical
activities, such as lifting of heavy bodies, are best
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suited
for
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men
.
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,
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are
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expected
to
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join
the armed forces and military
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jobs
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because
it involves a great amount of
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physical
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work
and living in secluded places for a long time, which might be a difficult task for
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women
as
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women
are
comparatively
supple mentally and
physically
.

Secondly
, it is evident that the
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women
are better
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suited
for creative works such as artists and literature professors or teachers.
Hence
, more ratio of girls is more inclined towards studying art subjects than boys. As it is a
psychologically
proven fact that the part of a human brain, which controls a person’s artistic
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behaviour
is stronger in
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women
than
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men
, this choice is
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expected
.
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, 65% of the artists in the world are
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women
, while
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men
are
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just
35%.

In conclusion
, as
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men
and women's bodies and brains
are made
differently
to
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work
in
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different
situations, I
firmly
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agree
with the argument that they are better
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suited
for
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different
kinds of
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jobs
.
Therefore
,
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men
are
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suited
for
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jobs
involving heavy power
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work
and
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women
innovative and artistic
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jobs
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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