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Memorising facts is the most Important way to succeed in education To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Memorising facts is the most Important way to succeed in education with this statement? v. 1
The most important way is to remember facts in the achievement of education. While I agree that memorizing is a special style to success in training. I believe that some other ways also essential for successful learning. On the one hand, the main reasons behind this statement and that is proved by science. Remember facts are a significant form of achievement in culture. This is because of subconscious mind helps to repeat and definitely we can achieve success in school. In other words, a day we trained our brain through the remembering process and after the repetition of fat, it will stick in our minds. For example, in 2017, The Hindu Times reported that the number of students following this habit of repeat and their success rate have been increased by 60%. On the other hand, I believe another particular way also important for achievement in learning. Firstly, desire is an essential criteria for any success. If we do not have any passion on studies, students will not achieve the heights. Secondly, compulsory we must have basic IQ levels, because without this we can not do anything in learning. In other words, a mentally retarded person doesn't have any ability to study. But normal people definitely get success in study if that person having desire. Finally, skills also necessary in this modern era because most of education based on technology so that efficient skills in technology leads to achieve the best. In conclusion, although I believe that recurrence is a great subject for success in information, I agree that other factors like desire, skills and technology also plays a significant role in getting success in learning.
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way is to remember facts in the achievement of education.
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I
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agree
that memorizing is a special style to
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success
in training. I believe that
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other
ways
also
essential for successful learning.

On the one hand, the main reasons behind this statement and that
is proved
by science. Remember facts are a significant form of achievement in culture. This is
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because
of subconscious mind
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helps
to repeat and definitely we can achieve
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success
in school. In
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other
words, a day we trained our brain through the remembering process and after the repetition of
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fat
, it will stick in our minds.
For example
, in 2017, The Hindu Times reported that the number of students following this habit of repeat and their
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success
rate have
been increased
by 60%.

On the
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other
hand, I believe another particular way
also
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important
for achievement in learning.
Firstly
, desire is an essential
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criteria
for any
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success
. If we do not have any passion on studies, students will not achieve the heights.
Secondly
, compulsory we
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must
have basic IQ levels,
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because
without this we can not do anything in learning. In
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other
words, a
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mentally retarded
person doesn't have any ability to study.
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normal
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people
definitely
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get
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success
in study if that person having desire.
Finally
,
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skills
also
necessary in this modern era
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because
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most of education
based on technology
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that efficient
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skills
in technology leads to achieve the best.

In conclusion
, although I believe that recurrence is a great subject for
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success
in information, I
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agree
that
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other
factors like desire,
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skills
and technology
also
plays a significant role in getting
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success
in learning.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Memorising facts is the most Important way to succeed in education with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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