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Media The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars famines accidents and crime Why do you think that is DO you think news should be a balance of both good and bad news v.2

Media The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars famines accidents and crime Why do you think that is DO you think news should be a balance of both good and bad news v. 2
News play a crucial role in every individuals life. When a person lives in a society, he should be aware of what is happening around him. In my view, news should be a balance of both good and bad information as it creates a sense of positivity and interest in people. The content provided in news are accurate and based on actual facts, due to globalization and advanced technology, the crime rates, accidents and wars are at increasing rate. So its responsibility of media to make people aware of the changes and dangers occurring around the world, so as to help and guide them to take right precautions and measurements. When people are affected by natural calamities like famines, news plays a vital role in helping the victims to gain funds and relief. In contrast, when people read majority of bad news a sense of negativity is created in them and they might lose interest in reading the newspapers. Good news often makes a person happy, when he reads good things a sense of well being and happiness is developed, it encourages a positive attitude and feeling of security in an individual. I however, feel news should be a balance of both good and bad information because it helps in balancing emotions and at the same time increase our interest in reading. On the other hand, news should have factual information without any bias. In conclusion, people should be motivated to read all kinds of news and direct their views in a positive manner and try to have positive attitude towards bad news also.
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play
a crucial role in every
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individuals
life. When a person
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in a society, he should be aware of what is happening around him. In my view,
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news
should be a balance of both
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good
and
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bad
information as it creates a sense of positivity and interest in
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people
.

The content provided in
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news
are accurate and based on actual facts, due to globalization and advanced technology, the crime rates, accidents and wars are at increasing rate.
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So
its responsibility of media to
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make
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people
aware of the
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changes
and
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dangers
occurring around the world,
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so as to
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help
and guide them to take right precautions and measurements. When
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people
are
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affected
by natural calamities like famines,
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plays a vital role in helping the victims to gain funds and relief.
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people
read
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majority of
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bad
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a sense of negativity
is created
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them and
they might lose interest in reading the newspapers.

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makes
a person happy, when he reads
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things a sense of
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well being
and happiness
is developed
, it encourages a
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attitude and feeling of security in an individual. I
however
, feel
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news
should be a balance of both
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good
and
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bad
information
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because
it
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helps
in balancing emotions and at the same time increase our interest in reading.
On the other hand
,
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news
should have factual information without any bias.

In conclusion
,
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people
should
be motivated
to read all kinds of
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news
and direct their views in a
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positive
manner and try to have
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positive
attitude towards
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bad
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news
also
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Media The majority of news being reported is bad news such as wars famines accidents and crime Why do you think that is DO you think news should be a balance of both good and bad news v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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