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Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this statement? v.2

Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. v. 2
There is a widespread belief that mass tourism has a negative impact on a country such as depletion of natural resources like fresh water, pollution, physical impact and so on and hence be deterred. I am in favour of this idea. In this essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. We must acknowledge that the tourism is a source of foreign economy which can be invested in numerous public infrastructures like schools, hospitals and roads. In addition, hotels, restaurants and transportations can benefit a lot and also it provides excellent opportunities for jobless people to support their livelihood. Nevertheless, air and noise pollution have surged significantly due to the frequent use of transportation like buses, cars and airlines. Transportation emission like carbon dioxide is one of the powerful greenhouse gasses which is responsible for tragedies such as landslides, droughts and of course the global warming. Not only noise pollution is causing excessive annoyance, stress and even hearing loss for humans but also it has affected wild life especially in sensitive area. To illustrate, wild animals are forced to alter their natural habitats due to loud noises. Over and above that, their activities have huge physical impact on marine, soil and vegetation. Take marine activities for an instance, it is obvious that in marine areas ( around coastal water, reefs and beach), many tourists activities occur in or around fragile ecosystem. Anchoring, snorkeling, sport fishing and scuba diving, yachting, and cruising are some of the activities that can cause direct degradation of marine ecosystems such as coral reefs, and subsequent impacts on coastal protection and fisheries which are usually the sustain of people and that attract the tourists. To conclude, although tourism helps in the economic development of a country, I believe government should pass environmental legislation for all tourists industries and impose a heavy fines in order to prevent climate change and degradation of viable ecosystems.
There is a widespread belief that mass tourism has a
negative
impact
on a country such as depletion of natural resources like fresh water, pollution, physical
impact
and
so
on and
hence
be deterred
. I am in
favour
of this
idea
. In this essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples.

We
must
acknowledge that the tourism is a source of foreign economy which can
be invested
in numerous public infrastructures like schools, hospitals and roads.
In addition
, hotels, restaurants and transportations can benefit a lot and
also
it provides excellent opportunities for jobless
people
to support their livelihood.

Nevertheless
, air and noise pollution have surged
significantly
due to the frequent
use
of transportation like buses, cars and airlines. Transportation emission like carbon dioxide is one of the powerful greenhouse gasses which is responsible for tragedies such as landslides, droughts and
of course
the global warming. Not
only
noise pollution is causing excessive annoyance,
stress
and even hearing loss for humans
but
also
it has
affected
wild life
especially
in sensitive area. To illustrate, wild animals
are forced
to alter their natural habitats due to loud noises.

Over and above that, their
activities
have huge physical
impact
on
marine
, soil and vegetation. Take
marine
activities
for an instance, it is obvious that in
marine
areas
(
around coastal water, reefs and beach),
many
tourists
activities
occur in or around fragile ecosystem. Anchoring, snorkeling, sport fishing and scuba diving, yachting, and cruising are
some of the
activities
that can cause direct degradation of
marine
ecosystems such as coral reefs, and subsequent
impacts
on coastal protection and fisheries which are
usually
the sustain of
people
and that attract the tourists.

To conclude
, although tourism
helps
in the economic development of a country, I believe
government
should pass environmental legislation for all tourists industries and impose a heavy fines in order to
prevent
climate
change
and degradation of viable ecosystems.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Mass Tourism has a negative effect on a country and should be discouraged. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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