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79. Is the ability to write and read more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.2

79. Is the ability to write and read more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2
Reading and writing are basic skills that people need to gain in order to communicate with others and to achieve academic knowledge. Some people may think that people always need to know how to read and write. It is true. However, if you are asked about the concept of whether these skills are more important today than in the past, which is your opinion? In my point of view, knowing how to write and read the words now is more important than in the past. I will explore my ideas in the following essay. First of all, before people often only communicated with people in local areas that meant they could talk to them in person. However, today with the invention of technology, people do not usually contact each other in person. To save time people usually send to others emails or text the messages. Therefore, if people cannot read or write the words, they cannot communicate with others; they will be isolated in their own positions. Another reason is that today people learn by reading books and search news on the internet rather than telling stories as in the past did. Thus, if people are not able to read and write the words, they cannot gain any knowledge. Moreover, nowadays every job requires the ability of reading and writing. If people cannot write or read the words that means they are not able to have a job or they may only work as menials. For example, in the past, famers might be not know how to read and write the words, they just needed to work hard in their farms. But now, even famers need to read and write to know about the directions of many kinds of plants that are suitable for each kind of land. Likewise, they also need to know to read and write in order to apply the advances in agricultural technology in order to develop their products. In conclusion, for two reasons, which I have just mentioned above, I strongly support the idea that nowadays people have to learn how to read and write. If one cannot write and read, one cannot live in this world.
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. It is true.
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about the concept of whether these
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, which is your opinion? In my point of view, knowing how to
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write
and
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the words
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is more
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than in the
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. I will explore my
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ideas
in the following essay.

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,
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communicated with
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in local areas that meant they could talk to them in person.
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,
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today
with the invention of technology,
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in person. To save time
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to others emails or text the messages.
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cannot
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the words, they cannot communicate with others; they will
be isolated
in their
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positions.

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today
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learn by reading books and search news on the internet
rather
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did.
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are not able to
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the words, they cannot gain any knowledge.
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, nowadays every job requires the ability of reading and writing. If
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people
cannot
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or
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the words that means they are not able to have a
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job or
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work as menials.
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, in the
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might be not
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how to
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the words, they
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needed to work
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in their farms.
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about the directions of
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kinds of plants that are suitable for each kind of land.
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in order to apply the advances in agricultural technology in order to develop their products.

In conclusion
, for two reasons, which I have
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strongly
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that nowadays
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. If one cannot
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, one cannot
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in this world.
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45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 79. Is the ability to write and read more important today than in the past? Why or why not? Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
362 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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